Talk:Bob Mahoney (director)

Clean up this page

Can anyone help me clean up this page please? Thanks. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Sellotapemaskingtape (talk • contribs) 15:43, 9 August 2017 (UTC)

I've done a little work to clean up the page for you. :) --Malcolmxl5 (talk) 16:12, 15 August 2017 (UTC)

Some proposed changes

The below keeps getting removed by Wikipedia – it is factual and I have added sources where possible, although a lot of the relevant material is not online.

Can anyone help continue this edit? I do know the subject, Bob Mahoney, which I mention here to avoid any COI - I'd like to do this properly if possible! Thanks

Mahoney was born in Athol Street, East London within the sound of the Cockney St Mary-le-Bow bells.

In 1982 Mahoney was invited to join the Board of Triumph Apollo Productions with Paul Gregg, Lionel Becker and D.C. Weldon. 1984 he also joined Triumph Theatre Productions with D.C.Weldon, Sir Ronnie Millar and J.Minskoff. The company became London’s most prolific theatre group, and produced shows both sides of the Atlantic. The Productions included:

Production Starring Sweet Bird of Youth Lauren Bacall Aren't We All Rex Harrison & Claudette Colbert Breaking The Code Derek Jacobi American Buffalo Al Pacino A Long Days Journey Into Night Jack Lemmon Walk In The Woods Alec Guinness & Edward Herman The Merchant of Venice Dustin Hoffman 1984 He co-wrote and directed his first TV drama. “Operation Julie” starring Colin Blakely. This three part drama was an International hit with viewing figures of 14.5 million in the UK.

1986/7 To the surprise of the Film World he persuaded Dirk Bogarde out of self imposed retirement to star and write the screenplay of Graham Greene’s “May We Borrow Your Husband”. Bob Directed.

1989. “A Day in summer” by J.L.Carr. He Co-produced and Directed. Screenplay Alan Plater starring Ian Carmichael, Peter Egan, Jack Sheppard, Jill Bennett and John Sessions.

1990. BMA ceased commercial production to concentrate on film & theatre. James Garrett & Partners became his advertising representatives

Contracted to Allied Stars with Dodi Fayed as Exec Producer in co-production with ORION Pictures in L.A. He wrote the screenplay for “Receiver and developed “Good Morning he Lied” by David Ambrose. . 1992. He was retained by Saatchi & Saatchi to direct the successful election campaign for the Prime Minister, John Major, including the £1000 Tax Bomb and the ‘Double Whammy’ broadcasts.

1992. He entered the world of TV series for the first time. Re shooting and formulating ‘Heartbeat” The programmes success lead to 18 series between 1992 and 2010.

1994. He directed the premier episode of International TV series “The Wanderer” starring Brian Brown, screenplay by Roy Clarke.

1995. Director. ‘Strike Force’ 90 minute Network TV.

1997. Director 4x Hours Lynda La Plante’s series ‘The Governor’ starring Janet McTeer

1998. Producer & Director. ‘Changing Places’ for BMG/YTV

1999. Directed Pauline Quirke in ‘Maisie Raine’ for the BBC.

2002 Content Consultant to Saatchi Saatchi developed film and TV and online projects. 18-30 The Movie & Critical Assignment.

2004. Producer “Critical Assignment” winner of the Hollywood Black Film Festival.

2006 Producer of Feature Films through his company Devonshire Productions.

2008. Producer “ Garden Of Eden” by Ernest Hemingway.

2013 Executive “Summer in February”

2014 Producer Addae script Brendan Foley

He is a member of BAFTA and the European Film Academy.

Agent. Duncan Heath UK.

Manager. Neville Shulman.

Thank you for your submission. There are two problems with this suggested addition. First, the draft above is somewhat promotional and does not adhere to Wikipedia's neutral point of view policy. Wikipedia is not a vehicle for advertising, marketing or public relations, but the purpose of this proposed version is clearly to put Mr. Mahoney in a good light, as evidenced by the use of phrases such as "prolific theatre group," "International hit," "To the surprise of the Film World," etc. Other editors that reverted you commented that the text too strongly resembles a resume or CV. Moreover, the structure of this piece clashes stylistically with Wikipedia. Well-written articles should be written in paragraphs of prose. They should summarize the subject, and contain a logical flow that demonstrates how each idea is related to the next. Simple chronological lists of events just don't hold together. They bounce from once idea to another without any indication of similarity, causality, or juxtaposition. For these reasons, I can't accept your submission as written. Altamel (talk) 01:14, 31 August 2017 (UTC)