Talk:Bobby Peel/GA1

Latest comment: 10 years ago by Sahara4u in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Sahara4u (talk · contribs) 02:28, 22 January 2014 (UTC)Reply

Lead

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  • "...,and was highly regarded by critics." → and was highly regarded by cricket critics.
  • "..and was highly regarded by critics." → well-known

Yorkshire cricketer

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  • Link "drawn"
  • "At the time, the Yorkshire team was generally inconsistent." In which aspect? They were not playing frequently or else?

Test debut

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  • "...not usually composed exclusively of the best cricketers in England." → Needs inline citation.
  • "The previous English tour Australia..." → The previous English tour of Australia ...
  • "Critics considered..." again "Cricket critics considered..."

Home Test matches

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  • "...match figures of 11 for 68." match-figures?
  • "...158 runs in his second innings, his maiden first-class hundred." At that time?!
  • At the end of the season, Hawke ended the careers of several players; the Yorkshire president told the committee that the "demon drink" was to blame.[44]" I think this sentence is unrelated to the para?

Australian tour of 1894–95

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  • Link to Melbourne Cricket Club
  • "After having five teeth extracted,[60]..." why?
  • ...the fifth day's play, Australia had scored 113 for two,..." We know that Test matches were of 6 days at that time, but most of our reader don't know this, I guess.
  • You may link "pair"
  • Link "duck" at the first instance
  • "...and 168 runs at 18.67, placing him sixth in the batting averages.[78]" → ...and scored 168 runs at 18.67, placing him sixth in the batting averages.[78]
  • The whole sentence reads "Peel ended the series with 27 wickets at 26.70, second in the averages behind Tom Richardson, and 168 runs at 18.67, placing him sixth in the batting averages." We don't need "scored" as it makes sense without. Sarastro1 (talk) 18:32, 22 January 2014 (UTC)Reply
  • "... to be eighth in the averages,..." → "to be" is redundant

Final seasons

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  • "Against Warwickshire, he scored 210 not out, the highest first-class score of his career,..." in an innings?

Later life

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  • The first para ends up with 1904 and the following para starts in 1898?
  • Wilfred Rhodes → Rhodes

Technique and personality

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  • His main rival as a spinner and for a place in the England team was Johnny Briggs; Peel bowled faster, which made him harder to hit,[3] Archie MacLaren, who captained England towards the end of Peel's career and was a team-mate and captain of Briggs, described Peel as "the cleverest bowler of my time". → a very long sentence
  • "He batted in the middle order,[84] including when he played for England, when he most often batted at number six,[17] and often effective when other batsmen had failed.[3]" no need of "when he"

Images

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  • All the images should have a proper ALT text.

A well-written article! I'll put this one on hold, and will be back to this as the above concerns resolve. —Zia Khan 02:28, 22 January 2014 (UTC)Reply

I think that should be everything. Thanks for the review. Sarastro1 (talk) 18:44, 22 January 2014 (UTC)Reply

Assessment

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GA review (see Wikipedia:Good article criteria and WP:GACN)
  1. Well-written.
    a (clear and concise prose which doesn't violate copyright laws, grammar and spelling are correct):   b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, and fiction:  
  2. Factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (well referenced):   b (citations to reliable sources):   c (Wikipedia:No original research):  
  3. Broad in its coverage.
    a (covers major aspects):   b (well focused):  
  4. Neutral .
    Fair representation, no bias:  
  5. Stable.
    No edit wars nor disputed contents:  
  6. Illustrated appropriately by images.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales):   b (appropriate use with suitable captions):  
  7. Conclusion: Good work with the article. Keep it up! —Zia Khan 21:12, 23 January 2014 (UTC)Reply
    Pass/Fail: