Talk:Bobby Richardson/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Larry Hockett (talk · contribs) 19:21, 23 May 2020 (UTC)

I'll be happy to take on this review. I will leave some section-by-section comments in the next few days. Thanks to the nominator for the work on this entry. Larry Hockett (Talk) 19:21, 23 May 2020 (UTC)

Lead

• "though it was not until 1959 that he would become a regular at second base" - Can we reword this to clarify whether he was playing another position or just not a regular? It seems unusual for someone to become an All-Star before becoming a regular.

• "catching McCovey's line drive in what The Sporting News called baseball's 13th most memorable play" - For context, the year they produced this list might be helpful; it doesn't appear to be specified in the body or in the SABR biography, but there's a book on Amazon by this title that was published in 1999.

Early life

• "11 out of 16 Major League Baseball (MLB) teams" - Consider rewording this sentence per MOS:NUMNOTES while still respecting the bit about comparable values. Maybe "Richardson received interest from 11 of the 16..."

• Consider linking Bill Harris - I assume this is Bill Harris (1930s pitcher).

1953-1956

• 171 hits - seems out of place; the rest of the 1954 stats are placed inside parentheses ("hits (171, first)").

I'll come back and finish the rest of the sections soon, but this looks like a well-written and well-referenced entry that shouldn't have any problem being promoted. Larry Hockett (Talk) 22:45, 25 May 2020 (UTC)

• Made all changes suggested so far! Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 16:19, 26 May 2020 (UTC)

1957-59

• The opening sentence of this section seems overly long. Consider splitting into two sentences.

• "great stops and catches...no one gets rid of the ball" - Per MOS:ELLIPSIS, place an nbsp before the ellipsis and a regular space after the ellipsis.

• "the first time as this year, the Yankees defeated the Braves..." - comma after time and not year

1960-62

• Reference spot check: The involvement of Sport magazine in the Corvette seems to be supported by the SABR bio, not by The Times and Democrat reference. (T&D mentions the Corvette but not Sport.)
  • T&D mentions he got the car, but SABR clarifies who it is from, so I changed it so that both references are cited for the sentence. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 02:48, 27 May 2020 (UTC)

• "The Society for American Baseball Research called 1962 his most productive year" - I wouldn't phrase it this way; SABR BioProject bios are the work of individual volunteer SABR members with a few others involved in the editorial process, so the statements in a bio don't really represent an official stance of the organization.

1963-66

• In the second sentence, I don't think you need "During the season".

• last paragraph - "1965 campaign" - It's hard to write an encyclopedia article without some jargon, but I think "season" is much better here for the more casual reader, especially since he did enter politics a decade later.

• "he addressed the fans" - addressed usually means "spoke to", not "said to".
  • Yes, and he did speak to them - this wasn't just a newspaper ad. Addressed is used correctly here. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 02:50, 27 May 2020 (UTC)

1976 political campaign

• succeeded in convincing Richardson --> convinced Richardson

Personal life

• "Today, he is a speaker" - Avoid today per WP:RELTIME.

References

• There is some inconsistency in the use of lowercase/uppercase for periodical article titles in the reference list. Most are written in title case, but some are sentence case (like ref #78, NY Daily News article).
  • The inconsistency is in the articles themselves. I formatted the titles however the article itself did. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 02:52, 27 May 2020 (UTC)

I think that's all I have. I appreciate your hard work on this well-written entry! Larry Hockett (Talk) 00:31, 27 May 2020 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail: