Talk:Bosa of York/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Malleus Fatuorum (talk · contribs) 17:29, 26 August 2012 (UTC)

Lead

• "He was educated and became a monk at Whitby Abbey". That's a little ambiguous; he was educated (possibly not at Whitby Abbey) and then became a monk at the abbey? Or was he educated at Whitby Abbey, where he subsequently became a monk?

  Resolved. Malleus Fatuorum 16:32, 3 September 2012 (UTC)

• "Bosa's section was centered on the city of York". I'm not fond of the word "section" here. What about something like "authority", or "jurisdiction" instead?

  I've rewritten parts of the lead and reordered others to resolve this issue. Malleus Fatuorum 16:32, 3 September 2012 (UTC)

Life

• "In 678, after Wilfrid was ejected from the bishopric of York and banished from Northumbria, Bosa was appointed to part of Wilfrid's diocese. Bosa owed his appointment to Theodore of Tarsus the Archbishop of Canterbury and King Ecgfrith of Northumbria, but the diocese of York was divided amongst three different bishops." I think the chronology's a bit awkward here. We should be told that the diocese was divided between three bishops before we're told that Bosa was appointed as one of them IMO.

  I've done a bit of rewriting here, so see what you think. Malleus Fatuorum 16:32, 3 September 2012 (UTC)

• "While archbishop, Bosa introduced a communal life for the clergy of the cathedral". Bosa was never an archbishop was he?

  Fixed. Malleus Fatuorum 16:32, 3 September 2012 (UTC)

Notes

• "One of the other two bishops appointed to the other parts of Wilfrid's old diocese were Eata for Bernicia with his cathedral at Lindesfarne". Presumably Bernicia was the name given to one of the three parts? Do we know what names were given to the other two? I'm not fond of that "other ... other"; could we not just say "one of the two bishops appointed to the other parts ..."?

  I think I've got the story right there now, but obviously you'll need to check what I've done. Malleus Fatuorum 19:04, 3 September 2012 (UTC)

References

• Why duplicate the ODNB sources when they're already cited in the Citations section? Why not add the full details there?

I've seen this, I know I need to work on it... but real life is really whomping my butt. Hopefully in the next few days. Ealdgyth - Talk 14:55, 3 September 2012 (UTC)

No hurry, I guessed you were busy. I've taken the liberty of making a few fixes myself, so you may want to check that I haven't screwed anything up. Malleus Fatuorum 16:32, 3 September 2012 (UTC)

Everything looks fine, Malleus. I'm hoping to not be so busy in October... doesn't look like September is going to be Wikipedia-friendly in real life! Ealdgyth - Talk 00:28, 8 September 2012 (UTC)

OK, we can close the review in that case. Malleus Fatuorum 00:59, 8 September 2012 (UTC)

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