Talk:Boston University CTE Center and Brain Bank

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Ivanca Lyson Peer Review

Introduction

I like the way you introduced the Boston University CTE Center and their purpose. Additionally, providing a quick definition of CTE was helpful.

Formation and Mission and Practices

I like that you included the people involved in the creation of the Brain Bank. In regards to the second paragraph in this section, the information sounds a bit repetitive so you might want to change the wording of the writing so it does not seem like the same information is being repeated. As I was reading the Mission and Practices section, I think the information regarding the Brain Bank that you mentioned in the second paragraph of the Formation Section could be added here instead. I think the first sentence of the second paragraph of Formation (When the VA-BU-CLF ...dedicated to the study of CTE) can be kept in the Formation section. However, I think the rest of that paragraph could be merged into the Mission and Practices first paragraph because it connects all the background information together. And if you really wanted to, I think you could even merge both sections together.

Notable Case Studies

I like the formatting of your case studies and they seem very relevant. They are clear and concise but I think you could benefit from adding some more details to the studies. I think the 2017 American Football Case Study was well written in terms of adding specific data that researchers found during the studies, so I think you could try to do this with the other case studies as well. Additionally I think it would be helpful to add a quick summary about CTE stages because I am not familiar with the stages, but you mentioned it a couple of times throughout the studies. Or you could add a link to the CTE Wikipedia article just so that it would be easy for people to reference to if they want to understand more about the disease in terms of the proteins involve etc.

Potential Applications

Although you touched upon some of the information mentioned in this section previously, I think this paragraph did a good job of summarizing the future of CTE research. You mentioned the Tau protein a couple times in the article and in this section specifically, you said the protein forms as as a result of blows to the skull. Maybe you could add a little bit more regarding the protein because it is such a crucial aspect of CTE.

Notable People

I think this was a very straightforward section that gave a good summary of the notable people involved with the CTE center. Maybe it would be better to have this section right after the Formation or Mission and Practices section because I think the Potential Applications is a good way to end the article. Also, the notable people were mentioned in the beginning of the article so you might not remember them if the rest of the article is focused on CTE case studies.

Overall Thoughts

I thought this was a very informative article about CTE from start to finish and I learned a lot about the topic. The images you will add will add a nice visual touch to the overall article. I like how you structured and wrote about the case studies so I think I will try to structure mine in a better format.

Serena DiLiberti Peer Review

General Thoughts

In general, the article looks good. It is informative and understandable to someone without any biological background and knowledge surrounding CTE. I think the general flow of the article makes sense and informs the reader of just enough information without being boring. The most important recommendation I have is to use some links to other Wikipedia pages, like the BU School of Medicine, CTE, etc. Also, a few pictures would help the article, as mentioned in the note. I learned from your article that you can cite the same source multiple times with the same number so thank you!

Introduction

Something super silly, you capitalize Tau in this section, but it is tau in other sections. I would recommend trying to be as consistent as possible.

Formation

I think an extra sentence or two describing what a brain bank is would be helpful. Why is it not just called a brain research center? This is a bit unclear. Although I think a formal definition should be brought up in the introduction, as it is the title of your article. Maybe a brief sentence or two describing how brain banks started (an organization in UK?) would be helpful as well.

Mission and Practices

This section is good. It sounds very clear and neutral.

Notable Case Studies

These are great examples. These are quite sad, but that is the truth behind the disease.

Potential Applications

This is a very nice way to end your article. I do not think you necessarily have to add anything to this section. It is a great concluding section.

Notable People

If these people have research, maybe you could link their papers to your article in a further readings section so readers could learn more about their research. Also I am not sure if this matters but you have a section called Notable Case Studies and Notable People. Maybe use important, prominent, or well known instead of reusing notable.

Sdiliberti (talk) 11:08, 26 February 2019 (UTC)