Talk:Bradwall/GA4/progress

Here is a summary of my responses, and comments.

Today, a small number of events take place in Bradwall, including social events at Bradwall Village Hall - two "events" in the one sentence repetitious. change if you can. -- YDone [1]

A Late Bronze Age axe head dated to 1000-801 BC has also been found near Fields Farm Fisheries in Bradwall. - err, not Roman and predates. Should be before Roman bit. Maybe change header to Pre-middle ages or something so all info can be included. -- YDone [2]

of Bradwall into two parts (moieties). - I'd make into prose - take out of parentheses and place after a comma. -- YDone [3]

You have "Hollins-wood" and "Hollins Wood" - sync up the spelling.... -- YDone [4]

Another notable detainee was one Joshua Tolley... - I don't understand why he was notable from the article. -- YDone [5] I don't know either, except that he was singled out by the citation, so have remove the word "notable"

The school became Bradwall Training School in 1908 - some description of what this means and how it differs from what it was would be helpful. -- YNAmended [6] I couldn't find out why, and while I would guess it was because of a change of ownership, can not speculate.

The article switches between metric and imperial. The easiest is to have both with one in brackets. -- YDone [7], using the "Convert" template

Worth adding in the Population section why the parish was split and what the population of Elworth is now I think. -- NUnchanged. Could not find out why the parish split, and the census data does not extend to small towns.

The sections are stubby -I'd put the Bradwall Reformatory School for Boys subsection into the landmarks section to combine mentions. -- NUnchanged I thought that the reformatory school fits better in history as it no longer exists, whereas the landmarks are current?

Combine all 1-2 sentence stanzas into bigger paras. Looks choppy otherwise. -- YDone I some places, others I think are logically distinct sentences?

Any reserves or greenspace notable in the vicinity? -- YDone Added a new section "Parks and nature reserves"

--Iantresman (talk) 20:21, 19 October 2012 (UTC)