Talk:Break It Off/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: 0z (talk · contribs) 22:30, 29 September 2012 (UTC)

Infobox

• Remove the February 27, 2007 date. Per Template:Infobox single, "This field should refer to the earliest known date".

  Removed. AARON• ^TALK

Lead

• It was written by Sean Paul, Donovan Bennett, K. Ford and Rihanna. Production was handled by Don Corleon. → Merge into one sentence
• Remove to U.S. Contemporary hit radio station playlists, and later to download digitally internationally on February 27, 2007,
• ...as a return to the formers roots. → "former's"?
• U.S. > US
• Maybe mention it peaked at number 10 in the Flanders region of Belgium since the country has two singles charts.
• ...and it was included on her Good Girl Gone Bad Tour (2007-09),... → and it was included on the set list of her Good Girl Gone Bad Tour (2007-09),

   Done all. AARON• ^TALK

Background and release

• link Rihanna
• ...and Bennett, and it also was mixed by Bennett. → Try and Bennett, who also mixed the song.
• Reminiscing on the "Break It Off" and Rihanna, → Remove "the"
• U.S. > US
• "Contemporary" doesn't need to be capitalized
• November 16 > November 13
• by the Island Def Jam Music Group. → by Def Jam Recordings.

   Done all. AARON• ^TALK 23:13, 2 October 2012 (UTC)

Composition and lyrics

• Remove , and were provided by Donovan Bennett – Already mentioned in "Background and release"

  Removed. AARON• ^TALK 23:14, 2 October 2012 (UTC)

Critical reception

• "Break It Off" garnered a response from music critics. → Add "positive" between "a" and "response"
• , and compared it to her debut single, "Pon de Replay". – You've already mentioned this in "Composition and lyrics"

   Done all. AARON• ^TALK 23:16, 2 October 2012 (UTC)

Chart performance

• "Break It Off" climbed into the top 30 songs at... → Remove "songs"
• In the first chart issue of Billboard → link Billboard
• "Break It Off" debuted on the US Billboard Hot 100 chart → Remove Billboard link and link the word with the Hot 100 link

   Done all. AARON• ^TALK 23:18, 2 October 2012 (UTC)

Live performances

• "Break It Off" was included on the set list of Rihanna's Good Girl Gone Bad Tour (2007-09), → Add "also" between "was" and "included"
• and was included on the DVD release, → Add "later" between "was" and "included"

   Done all. AARON• ^TALK 23:19, 2 October 2012 (UTC)

Credits and personnel

• No issues

Charts

• No issues

Radio adds and release history

• No issues

References

• FN3 – fix date formats (i.e. August 8, 2006. Retrieved December 7, 2011.)
• FN4 – fix dashes
• FN5 – fix dashes
• FN6 – fix dashes
• FN7 – fix dashes
• FN8 – About.com shouldn't be italicized. Also, fix date format
• FN10 – fix date format
• FN11 – Author's name is missing
• FN13 – fix date format
• FN14 – fix date format
• FN15 – link Billboard and Prometheus Global Media
• FN30 – fix dash
• FN31 – fix dash

   Done all. AARON• ^TALK 23:22, 2 October 2012 (UTC)

Summary

I've decided to put this article on hold for 7 days. Also, why is there no "Track lising" section? — Oz (talk) 06:45, 30 September 2012 (UTC)

Added. Thanks. AARON• ^TALK 23:26, 2 October 2012 (UTC)

Passed :) — Oz (talk) 23:37, 2 October 2012 (UTC)

Thanks. AARON• ^TALK 23:39, 2 October 2012 (UTC)

Second opinion

Just glancing at the article briefly, my biggest concern is the chart performance section. I question if it's necessary to give a blow-by-blow account of every move the song made on every chart. I'd suggest compressing it down some to mention just the peak ranking and date, and the number of weeks total on the charts. —Torchiest ^talk_edits 22:19, 2 October 2012 (UTC)

• It only charted in Belgium and two charts in the US. As it charted on two main charts and one component chart, I've given more information about their charting, so that the section isn't one poor sentence long. I believe it is fine the way it is. AARON• ^TALK 23:24, 2 October 2012 (UTC)