Talk:Breaking Out Is Hard to Do/GA1

GA Review

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Hello. I will be doing the GA review for this article. Here are some suggestions for improvement:

• Is there a better source available for the second sentence? IMDB should be avoided.
  • I've removed it. I think the original broadcast date can survive without a source, and guest-stars can be found on the credits for the episode.
• Can the Matisse painting be named and wikilinked?
  • Done by another user.
• "Chris begins a career as a rickshaw driver, and Peter becomes a sumo wrestler, but is spotted by Joe on the television shortly after." - who is spotted, Chris or Peter?
  • Clarified.
• What is draftiginally?
  • My fault - I must have been going to type 'originally' but changed the word and forgot to delete all of it.
• "The police helicopter pilot in Asiantown stating he pretends he is shooting at Jamie Farr and Alan Alda when firing rockets is a reference to the actors of M*A*S*H" - this sentence needs to be reworded b/c I have no idea what it means.
  • Done. I admit it was a bit confusing.

The article will be on hold for seven days to allow for improvements. Nikki♥311 21:39, 25 November 2008 (UTC)

All done. Qst (talk) 19:08, 27 November 2008 (UTC)

Great. Pass. :) Nikki♥311 23:10, 28 November 2008 (UTC)