Talk:Brougham Castle

GA Review

This review is transcluded from Talk:Brougham Castle/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: ✽ Juniper§ Liege ^(TALK) 07:47, 1 April 2010 (UTC)

Quick fail criteria assessment

1. The article completely lacks reliable sources – see Wikipedia:Verifiability.

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2. The topic is treated in an obviously non-neutral way – see Wikipedia:Neutral point of view.

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3. There are cleanup banners that are obviously still valid, including cleanup, wikify, NPOV, unreferenced or large numbers of fact, clarifyme, or similar tags.

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4. The article is or has been the subject of ongoing or recent, unresolved edit wars.

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5. The article specifically concerns a rapidly unfolding current event with a definite endpoint.

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Articles passes quick-fail assessment. Main review to follow. ✽ Juniper§ Liege ^(TALK) 07:49, 1 April 2010 (UTC)

Preliminary concerns

• The article is generally very well written; however I have taken the liberty to alter a few sentences to improve the flow of the text. These changes are all structural and do not affect the meaning of the material, but include removing sentence fragments, and integrating clauses. If there are problems or concerns with these changes, please revert of contact me for discussion.
• The only other problem with the article concerns overlinking. I have fixed the problems per WP:OVERLINK. Generally, names/terms should only be linked once in an article. Also, well known terms/names such as keep or manor do not need to be wikilinked (though I have left them where they specifically refer to a place).✽ Juniper§ Liege ^(TALK) 08:03, 1 April 2010 (UTC)
• I have rephrased a couple of expressions which contain weasal words or which were not in keeping with the sombre and academic tone successfully established in the article. One such example is: "It was under the youngest, Thomas Tufton, 6th Earl of Thanet, that the fortunes of Brougham Castle took a turn for the worse" which I reworked as "It was under the youngest, Thomas Tufton, 6th Earl of Thanet, that Brougham Castle suffered particular neglect". Again, I have not made alterations where the meaning of the sentence would be substantially changed. ✽ Juniper§ Liege ^(TALK) 10:26, 1 April 2010 (UTC)
• The title "Picturesque ruin" borders on weasaling (picturesque according to whom?), so I have replaced it with "Castle ruin", however another alternative would be fine. ✽ Juniper§ Liege ^(TALK) 10:48, 1 April 2010 (UTC)
• Final change to the references layout to conform to the way footnotes and notes are generally set out. However, if the originals were in keeping with how castle pages are styles, the changes can be reverted. ✽ Juniper§ Liege ^(TALK) 11:30, 1 April 2010 (UTC)

Main review

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose):

   • Very well written. Some minor problems with sentence fragments were encountered, but that is to be expected in such a content-laden article. Problems encountered with fixed.

   b (MoS):

   • Conforms to manual of style. Slight problem with unnecessary linking, but only a minor concern which was easily rectified.

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (references):

   • Well referenced.

   b (citations to reliable sources):

   • Citations are to third party publications.

   c (OR):

   • No evidence of OR.

3. It is broad in its scope.

   a (major aspects):

   • Addresses major aspect of article subject matter.

   b (focused):

   • Remains focused. No digressions. Article remains admirably focused on the subject matter (the castle).

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy:

   • No issues concerning POV evident.

5. It is stable:

   • No edit wars etc.

6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales):

   • Images are properly tagged and justified.

   b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

   • Images are accompanied by contextual captions.

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail: PASS ✽ Juniper§ Liege ^(TALK) 11:33, 1 April 2010 (UTC)

Picturesque ruin

I've just put the word Picturesque back in, as the relevant section makes the intended artistic meaning clear: "During the late 18th century, the Lake District became a popular visitor attraction and the sensibilities of Romanticism glamorised historic ruins such as Brougham Castle." (It would help if I'd spelt it correctly in the edit summary though!)--Northernhenge (talk) 11:04, 1 April 2010 (UTC)

Royal visit

Prior to this edit, the article used a royal visit as evidence that the condition of the castle had improved. The edit removed that implication. Do we know if the king stayed at the castle? If so, I assume it would have been in splendid condition. If he just visited and moved on, it could have been in any condition. If he stayed, I think the edit should be reverted (and saying "stayed at" instead of "visited"). If he just visited, the current version seems OK to me. --Northernhenge (talk) 11:46, 8 April 2010 (UTC)

The situation is explained more fully later on in the article: the Earl of Cumberland hosted James at the castle where expensive feasts were held for him. The repairs were carried out by the dowager countess before the earl got his hands on the castle, the royal visit just confirms that Brougham was in a decent state. It's difficult to go into much detail in the lead, but I think the change is ok. The implication that the castle was in a good state by the time James arrived is still there, just a bit weaker. As "visited" could be a bit vague, I've changed it to "entertained at Brougham". How's that? Nev1 (talk) 13:56, 8 April 2010 (UTC)

I'll undo Dank's edit and reinstate "to such a condition that". I didn't want to do that without checking the context. Thanks. --Northernhenge (talk) 22:15, 8 April 2010 (UTC)

Fair enough. Nev1 (talk) 22:36, 8 April 2010 (UTC)

Use of "Inflation" template

The template says: "This template is incapable of inflating Capital expenses, government expenses, or the personal wealth and expenditure of the rich." so unfortunately it doesn't seem to apply to Brougham Castle's building costs and probably not to its maintenance costs. --Northernhenge (talk) 20:39, 22 March 2011 (UTC)

This is an issue that's been moving along slowly elsewhere and I've got no objection to removing the estimates so have done so. I don't pretend to have more than a basic grasp of economics and related issues, but I can envisage problems in converting between medieval and modern currency. Nev1 (talk) 18:48, 23 March 2011 (UTC)

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Pronunciation

Is it pronounced "brum", "brome", "brug-um", or "broe-um"? Or something else? Please add the pronunciation if possible. 106.68.197.3 (talk) 06:59, 19 February 2017 (UTC)

As per the Oxford dictionary, the general word is /ˈbruː(ə)m/.--Adûnâi (talk) 13:59, 19 February 2017 (UTC)

"The second Roger Clifford"

Is "the second Roger Clifford" a correct name? I'd change it to "the second Roger de Clifford" at least, but I'm not sure about this either.--Adûnâi (talk) 07:55, 19 February 2017 (UTC)

Either works and the two are often used pretty much interchangeably in the sources. Nev1 (talk) 14:19, 19 February 2017 (UTC)

Names of daughters

In this edit I reinstated the names of Vieuxpont's daughters and reinstated a deleted reference. I see the daughters' names, and the reference, have gone again. Does anyone remember why they were removed? I would just put them back, but I'm not about to start an edit war! --Northernhenge (talk) 23:22, 19 February 2017 (UTC)