Talk:Brudenell Social Club

GA Review

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Reviewer: Cartoon network freak (talk · contribs) 19:28, 6 November 2016 (UTC)

Lead

• best known as → which is best known as  Done
• It is a run as a 'not for profit organisation' → do you mean non-profit organization here?  Done Yep Cavie78 (talk) 22:48, 13 November 2016 (UTC)
• two areas - a 400 capacity → two areas—a 400 capacity  Done
• and a bar area/games room → and a bar area and games room section.  Done
• It is a run as a nonprofit organisation and retains the → While being a nonprofit organization, it retains  Done
• a 400 capacity concert room and a bar area and games room section. The games room occasionally holds gigs alongside the concert room. → a 400 capacity concert room, and a bar area and games room section, which occasionally holds gigs alongside the concert room.  Done
• After falling into disrepair this → After falling into disrepair, this  Done
• Hyde Park's population, as more students moved into the area. → Hyde Park's population caused by more students moving into the area.  Done
• In 2004–2005 Noise complaints forced the club to briefly abandon gigs. → Between 2004 and 2005, noise complaints forced the club to briefly abandon gigs.  Done
• and installed and a new → and installed, while a new  Done
• 'secret gigs' → "secret gigs".  Done
• of the 'best live music venue' in → Remove the '  Done
• competition and was shortlisted → competition, and was shortlisted  Done
• 2014 'UK Venue of the Year' → Remove the '  Done
• 'Britain's Best Small Venue' award → Remove the '  Done

Infobox

• Everything seems to be ok :)

History

• are not known → are unknown  Done
• After this plan fell through → However, after this plan remained unmaterialized  Done changed to However, after this plan failed to come to fruition,
• car park → car parking  Not done car park is correct in British English
• This clubhouse opened → Subsequently, the clubhouse  Done
• The Brudenell later → Do you mean the family here or the clubhouse?  Done I've added a note to the lead to explain that the venue is frequently reffered to as simply The Brudenell
• The Brudenell later hosted initial meetings by the group → ??  Done see above
• In 2004–2005 → From 2004 to 2005,  Done
• badges and, in July 2005, hosted the 'Keep the Brudenell A-Live Aid' all-day gig in order → badge and hosted the "Keep the Brudenell A-Live Aid" all-day gig in July 2005 in order
• club to an entirely public venture – a "publicly open, licensed place that runs as a social enterprise and reinvests its money" → club to an entirely public venture—a...  Done
• money" – with → money"—with  Done
• Because the Brudenell reinvests its profits, → As the club's profits are reinvested  Done
• and showers and upgrading the dressing rooms → and showers, and upgrading the dressing rooms  Done
• which Clark believes → you've already used "believes" before this; try a new word  Done changed to "feels"
• into two areas: a 400 capacity → into two areas—a 400 capacity  Done
• doors and a bar area → doors, and a bar area  Done
• working men's club";[2] offering → Replace ; with a normal , please  Done
• comfortable chairs → "comfortable" chairs (otherwise it may portray FANCRUFT)  Done
• the world and works → the world, and works  Done
• owned by the Clark's → owned by the Clarks  Done
• who can often be found behind the bar at the venue → who is often present at the bar (no need of so many details)  Done changed to "who is often present behind the bar"
• Overall, there are too many paragraphs in this section, and many of them could be associated with others as delving on the same idea  Done I've combined some paragraphs
• Can you please add an image of something to this section? It's pretty long and reading it without any thumbnails is uncomfortable  Not done I'll see if I can get hold of/take a picture of the concert room and/or bar area but I don't have one right now Cavie78 (talk) 23:31, 16 November 2016 (UTC)

Notable performances

• 'secret gigs' → "secret gigs"  Done
• It has been described as a → Echoing this thought, the club has been described as a  Not done It's not really echoing the previous thought
• 'Cribsmas' → "Cribsmas"  Done
• the shows saw the band play through each of the three albums they had released up to that point (The Cribs, The New Fellas and Men's Needs, Women's Needs, Whatever) along with associated b-sides. → the shows portrayed the band performing material from their three albums they had released up to that point—XY...—along with associated B-sides.  Done I think "saw the band play" is better than "portrayed"
• In December 2008 the Cribs → In December 2008, the Cribs  Done
• of their 'Cribsmas' shows, as Live At The Brudenell Social Club → of their "Cribsmas" show as XY...  Done
• as a music venue.[2] The Wedding → as a music venue; The Wedding  Done
• who played these → who played at these  Done
• Leeds band ¡Forward, Russia! also played as part of the celebrations following their brief 2013 reformation → Band ¡Forward, Russia! additionally performed as part of the celebrations following their brief 2013 reformation (the fact they're from Leeds is overfluous)
• the Brudenell's licencee → why is "Brudenell" italicized, and the correct writing is "the Brudenell"  Done I have no idea why this was italicised! "the Brudenell's licencee" is the correct form here
• Image > Set an "and" in the enumeration  Done

Awards

• In 2014 the Brudenell → Set comma after "2014"  Done
• Remove commas before and after "with Base Studios in Stourbridge"  Done
• the 'best live music venue' category → the Best Live Music Venue category  Done
• Remove the ' from "Rock the House"  Done
• 'UK Venue of the Year' → same as above  Done
• for the NME's → Remove "the"  Not done This is the correct form. The NME is referred to as "the NME" not "NME"
• 'Britain's Best Small Venue' → Remove the '  Done
• and the Yorkshire & Humberside → and in the ...  Done
• Set comma after "In September 2016"  Done

Footnotes

• Set full stop after 2nd footnote please.  Done

Other stuff

Copy-violation

• 22.5% is OK

Images

• All OK with images :)

Links

• No disambiguation links. Good job!

References

• As far as I checked them, the references do cover the assertations made in this article, and they cite reliable sources
• No dead links! Good job!.

Outcome

• I've put this  On hold for 7 days in order to allow further edits to this article. Best regards and good luck, Cartoon network freak (talk) 18:34, 16 November 2016 (UTC)

Thanks very much for the review. Let me know if there are any further issues Cavie78 (talk) 23:31, 16 November 2016 (UTC)

Gladly passing! Great job! Cartoon network freak (talk) 20:13, 17 November 2016 (UTC)

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.

Edit war

There appears to be an edit war going on over whether this venue is for-profit or non-profit. Please discuss it here. Beasting123 (talk) 14:53, 26 October 2018 (UTC)

The false and unaccountable information was added by one user, who has repeatedly put that claim back in. As far as I'm aware, if you add text to an article and someone edits or removes it you aren't supposed to edit war to retain that text. There is no indepedent references available for the claim.

79.69.123.112 (talk) 15:01, 26 October 2018 (UTC)

Hello IP. I'm rather confused by your repeated attempts to remove the 'not for profit' statement from this article, especially as this appears to be the only page you edit on Wikipedia. The article has been through a Good Article review and contains several references to support the claim. You seem to be suggesting that both the Brudenell's official website and its owner are lying about it? Why would they do this? Cavie78 (talk) 11:17, 30 October 2018 (UTC)