Talk:Bruno Pontecorvo/GA1

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Reviewer: Wizardman (talk · contribs) 14:53, 24 November 2016 (UTC)Reply


This has waited way too long for a review. I'll try to get to it in the next few days. Wizardman 14:53, 24 November 2016 (UTC)Reply

Wow. Thanks for this. The article has been in the queue for ages. Hawkeye7 (talk) 22:02, 24 November 2016 (UTC)Reply
I nominated Pontecorvo as a physicist rather than a military figure because, although he worked on reactor development for the Manhattan Project, he never worked on weapons development. Big mistake on my part. Hawkeye7 (talk) 22:23, 26 November 2016 (UTC)Reply

Starting with the image review, they all look good, but File:Carlo Franzinetti e Bruno Pontecorvo.jpg should be modified. I would believe it is public domain in the same manner the other personal images are, but "too commonly published" is not how copyright claims work, that part definitely needs fixing. Wizardman 15:01, 24 November 2016 (UTC)Reply

I thought it was from CERN, but they say they got it from Wikimedia Commons. It is in the PD in Italy, and since Franzinetti died in the 1980, it is highly likely that it was taken before 1978, and is therefore PD in the US too; but I cannot be sure. So I have removed the image from the article. Hawkeye7 (talk) 22:02, 24 November 2016 (UTC)Reply

Sounds good. As for the sources, they all check out on reliability; no copyright check since they're pretty much all online but assuming good faith on that end. Only irk is that the final ref should have a language icon to go along with it, otherwise that's all fine as well. Hopefully I'll be able to do the prose review tomorrow. Wizardman 15:38, 26 November 2016 (UTC)Reply

Added lang=Russian, but we don't get little icons any more. Also added a trans-title, but the translation is mine, and my Russian is limited. Hawkeye7 (talk) 22:23, 26 November 2016 (UTC)Reply

Here's what I found on the prose front:

  • "and then the author of numerous studies in " rm then
      Done Hawkeye7 (talk) 19:57, 3 December 2016 (UTC)Reply
  • There's quite a few "and"s in the second sentence in early life, which makes the sentence a run-on; reword.
      Done Re-wrote this bit. Hawkeye7 (talk) 19:57, 3 December 2016 (UTC)Reply
  • "After attending the first two years of engineering at the University of Pisa, he decided to switch to physics in 1931." That first half reads odd. Perhaps start with "He attended the University of Pisa.." and go from there.
      Done This is very common among physicists of his generation; there were few universities offering courses in physics. Hawkeye7 (talk) 19:57, 3 December 2016 (UTC)Reply
  • "Thus, just when he needed it most, Pontecorvo had a job offer in the United States." Can't say I'm a fan of the sentence, moving from encyclopedia to novel here.
      Done Deleted this sentence. Hawkeye7 (talk) 19:57, 3 December 2016 (UTC)Reply

Up to Oklahoma, will try to finish rest later today. Wizardman 15:53, 3 December 2016 (UTC)Reply

Anything remaining in the article I went ahead and fixed myself. Everything looks good now, so I'll pass the article. In particular, I appreciated that the more scientific spots in the article were easy to read and understand. Wizardman 15:04, 4 December 2016 (UTC)Reply