Talk:Bryan Baker (fighter)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 18:35, 8 January 2011 (UTC)

I will review this article shortly. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 18:35, 8 January 2011 (UTC)

Here are the issues I found with the article:

• "Baker fought in various promotions," has fought sounds better
• Early career is unsourced, and there's probably a couple terms that have article that should be linked in there (for example, submission. i know what that is, but others may not).
• "Whilst on the ground, Baker was able to get top position, which prompted Forbes to give his back" confusing as worded.
• You vary in how wins are written; sometimes it's "via first round TKO (punch)" other times it's "via first round TKO via punches". Try to be consistent here.
• The references are just bare URLs; titles, dates, publishers, etc. need to be added.
• There's not much structure in a good portion of the article. Post-WEC and first stint, for example, are just 1-2 sentence paragraphs that all start with "Baker". A He can be thrown in here and there, and sentence could be modified to break the monotony.
• There's no personal life information in the article. I could understand if there's little out there, but I'm sure there's at least something.

This is a good start to the article, but I'm going to have to quick-fail it, as there is quite a bit of work needed yet to get it to GA status. The other articles you have up at GAN are in much better shape, so I would concentrate on fine-tuning those first (these comments may or may not apply to the others).