Talk:Butch Allison/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: CycloneIsaac (talk · contribs) 20:55, 3 April 2017 (UTC)

Reviewing later.—CycloneIsaac (Talk) 20:55, 3 April 2017 (UTC)

• The lead should probably mention how much he's played in the NFL/CFL, even though how little it was.
• Was there any info on his childhood/before high school?
• His death is not mentioned outside the infobox.
• Per WP:SWYGT, you have to mention you used Newspapers.com. Add |via=Newspapers.com to the citations and {{free access}} to the end of the ref.

Only a few things to fix or improve.—CycloneIsaac (Talk) 01:08, 4 April 2017 (UTC)

• The lead has been expanded.
• Information on his childhood was very sparse. The second obit (reference 10) provides his parents' names, but that's it before high school. He was a minor enough sports figure that no-one ever ran bio pieces on him to the extent of digging into his childhood.
• Added a section for this, although it will have to be a one-liner because cause of death is not clear in the sources.
• Quoting WP:SWYGT: "However, if you have read Smith's book yourself, you may cite it directly; there is no need to give credit to any sources, search engines, websites, library catalogs, etc., that led you to that book. You also do not need to specify how you obtained and read Smith's book; so long as you are confident that you read a true and accurate copy, it does not matter whether you read the book using an online service like Google Books, using preview options at a bookseller's website like Amazon, on an e-reader (except to the extent that this affects page numbering), through your library, with online paid databases of scanned publications, using reading machines, or any other method." That guideline requires that you say if you read an excerpt of the book rather than the whole thing or only learned about the information in that book via a citation. It explicitly does not require you to say what databases you used (and encourages you not to, actually).

@CycloneIsaac: Many thanks for the review! ~ Rob₁₃^Talk 08:06, 4 April 2017 (UTC)