Talk:CFVO-TV/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Eddie891 (talk · contribs) 22:06, 24 August 2020 (UTC)

I will take this on shortly... Eddie891 ^Talk _Work 22:06, 24 August 2020 (UTC)

Comments

• "While the English-language outlets in western Canada would be the second private commercial outlet in those areas, the Ottawa station would be the first French-language commercial facility in the National Capital Region." maybe try something like "there was one existing[...] there were no" rather than 'would be the (first or second)', I think that would be clearer
• "a cooperative media outlet, settling on television." what does 'cooperative' mean here?
• "The new organization," is the org CTVO or something else? When did it seek to "raise $1 million" -- before or after July?
• "all but one of its members " would 'employees' fit better here?
• " however, there" does 'however' really fit here? I'd suggest removing it
• "output would be locally produced" would 'content' be a better stand-in for 'output'?
• "strong impression" a good or bad one?
• " dozen area organizations" would 'local organisations' fit better?
• "... and 60 written submissions backed the CTVO bid" do we know about the other bids?
• "that the funds raised would " had they raised all the money they sought to?
• "president Raymond" suggest "their president..."
• link tower of Babel
• "would broadcast the first UHF" when?
• "However, signs of financial troubles began to arise" maybe "soon began to arise"?
• I think overall, you could add some more links
• " and not living up to its promise" maybe reiterate the promise here
• "The new year brought" maybe clarify what year
• "claiming he was "tired"" tired of what?
• "The 1976 renewal cycle" what does 'renewal cycle' refer to here?
• "that it would loan $700,000" loan who the money?

That's my initial comments. OVerall, very nice work. Minor stuff, none of it is huge, I won't hinge my final call upon any individual point. happy to discuss further. Best, Eddie891 ^Talk _Work 00:57, 27 August 2020 (UTC)

Made a number of changes, though not all, Eddie891, but I want to address some things specifically:

• It's a legit cooperative. That's really significant as it's what led to a lot of interest in this station pre-launch, what won them the licence (as this form of organization is a novelty in television broadcasting) and arguably what failed it in the long run. See, for instance, History of the cooperative movement.
• I prefer area over local because of the large region (two provinces) served by this station.
• Yes we do have info on the rival bids: there's a section talking about the other bids (look for the mention of Corporation Civitas).
• The "tired" is a quote; he literally said "I am tired".

Raymie (t • c) 01:43, 27 August 2020 (UTC)

• Raymie I've had a look at a number of sources, everything lines up except for the one thing I changed. Otherwise, this meets the GA criteria-- passing. Eddie891 ^Talk _Work 13:43, 29 August 2020 (UTC)