Talk:California Gurls/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Calvin999 (talk · contribs) Aaron • ^{You Da One} 01:59, 22 June 2012 (UTC)

References

• Like I also stated in my review of "Super Bass", there are many issues with the format of the references in this article.

• Please remember that the GA criteria says nothing about how the references might be formated. —Hahc21 21:47, 22 June 2012 (UTC)

• Additionally, there are 9 uncategorized redirects, 1 connection issue and 6 dead links
• I will put the article on hold while you fix the issues with the references. Once they are complete, I will review the prose of the article.

I will be taking back my original role of reviewing this article. Aaron • ^{You Da One} 01:59, 22 June 2012 (UTC)

Info box

• Order the genres alphabetically.

Lead

• Critical reception of "California Gurls" has been near universally positive → "California Gurls" garnered positive reviews from music critics,
• Link music video

Background and composition

• Link texted, as some people may not know what that means. For example I think American's say paged and SMS?
• By having a picture in this section, the block quote just looks like a paragraph, you might want to put the picture somewhere else in the article? Or put it on the right and the audio file on the left?
• Perry's site → website?
• According to digital sheet music published at Musicnotes.com by Sony-ATV Music Publishing, → remove
• I think this section could be improve further, it is a bit conversational in some places.

Critical reception

• Amy Sciaretto of websiteArtistdirect → Need a space in between website and Artistdirect
• You like to use a lot of quotes don't you! Some need to be paraphrased as it consists basically of quotes at the moment. WP:QUOTEFARM
• On May 25, 2012,Billboard → Need a space in between the comma and Billboard

Chart performance

• "California Gurls" sold 294,000 digital downloads in its first week and debuted at number one on the US Billboard Digital Songs chart. It debuted at number two on the Billboard Hot 100, making it Perry's highest debut on the chart since 2008 with her debut single "I Kissed a Girl". On the issue dated June 19, 2010, the song reached number one, becoming Perry's second number-one song and Snoop Dogg's third.[28] → Is this all supported by ref 28? If yes, put the ref at the end of each sentence.
• First line says it sold 294,000 in it's first week, but a bit further down says 318,000?
• and also received Gold certification from RIANZ. → WP:OR
• (meaning it has sold over 600,000 units) → (denoting sales of over 600,000 units)

Music video (both sections)

• she said. → Remove, keep as one quote but put a full stop.
• The settings are inspired in part by Alice's Adventures in Wonderland, Charlie and the Chocolate Factory, and the board game Candy Land, → Sources?
• What is "in a nod" ?

Live performances

• Perry was the musical guest on the NBC variety series Saturday Night Live on September 25, 2010, (hosted by Amy Poehler) and performed the song live during the first music session of the program. → WP:OR
• Perry performed the song on The GRAMMY Nominations Concert Live! – Countdown to Music's Biggest Night on December 1, 2010. "California Gurls" was included as the encore for her California Dreams Tour. → WP:OR

Covers, samples, and media usage

• I did a slight c/e

Track listings

• Spilt into two columns

Charts and certifications

• Tables should be marked up for WP:ACCESS. Ask if you don't know what this is, or would like me to do it for you.
• Bulgaria has a dead link tag against it.
• The year-end table doesn't need Billboard, Official Charts Company etc.
• Chart precession and succession table, I'm pretty sure that we don't use this now.

References

• Check for any capitalised words and make them lowercase (For example, FN 43)
• FN2: Link Rolling Stone and add the publisher
• FN5: Link Toronto Sun
• FN7: Unlink Toronto Sun and remove "the"
• FN9: Remove "the" and Tribune Company should be in the publisher field
• FN13: Digital Spy should not be italicised
• FN15: Entertainment Weekly should be italicised
• FN17: Unlink RS and JW
• FN18: Katharine Weymouth is the publisher
• FN19: No work or publisher fields
• FN24: USA Today should be italicised
• FN25: Chicago Tribune should be italicised
• FN26: Same as FN24
• FN27: Publisher is Prometheus Global Media
• FN28: Unlink Billboard and add the correct publisher from FN27
• FN29: Same again
• Isn't Yahoo a blog?

Further reference mistakes I can see are dead links, a mix of date formats, missing dates and access dates, missing and wrong work parameters, and missing and wrong publisher parameters. (FN133 is missing both).

Summary

I'm really sorry, but in addition to the large amount of mistakes in the references, there are some cases of WP:OR and prose issues, I'm failing this article. Spend some time going through each section throughly, and perhaps read them out loud to yourself, as what you have written sounds different to just being read. Aaron • ^{You Da One} 11:35, 22 June 2012 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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