Talk:Cane Beds, Arizona

Latest comment: 2 years ago by An anonymous username, not my real name in topic GA Review

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The result was: promoted by Theleekycauldron (talk23:55, 10 March 2022 (UTC)Reply

  • ... that though Cane Beds is entirely in Arizona, many of its services – including a medical center, airport, and television – are in Utah?
    • ALT1: ... that Cane Beds might have been "Virgin Bottoms"?
    • ALT1a: ... that Cane Beds replaced "Virgin Bottoms"?
    • ALT2: ... that some canes named a town?
    • ALT3: ... that though the Mormon Church rejected polygamy, it continued in isolated communities like Cane Beds during the 20th century?
    • ALT4: ... that Cane Beds was initially merged with a school district serving a different state because it didn't have enough students?
    • ALT5: ... that the renaming of a section of road near Cane Beds to honor a dead local man had been requested by the man himself?
    • ALT6: ... that just south of the Arizona-Utah border, you can follow a dead man to his hometown?
    • ALT7: ... that former Virgin Bottoms is made of Shinarump?
    • ALT7a: ... that you'll find Shinarump in former Virgin Bottoms?
    • Reviewed: Template:Did you know nominations/1970 United States Senate election in New York
    • Comment: A surprising number of potential hooks for a relatively short article (though alt0/4, alt1/7s and alt5/6 are pairs kind of playing on the same thing, in different ways). Alt6 is a play on the road name. Alt2 is based on a fairly-successful hook that ran for History of Flagstaff, Arizona. Alt1(a) and 7(a) are edgy and weird, and can be discarded or rephrased or whatever.

5x expanded by Kingsif (talk). Self-nominated at 03:20, 24 February 2022 (UTC).Reply

Tweaked ALT1a to T:DYK/P1

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Reviewer: An anonymous username, not my real name (talk · contribs) 00:37, 16 April 2022 (UTC)Reply


I will do this review. --An anonymous username, not my real name (talk) 00:37, 16 April 2022 (UTC)Reply

It looks very good already. My only critiques are these:

  • The Name section should be changed to Etymology and moved to the top, as is standard for any article.
  •   Done
  • The second comma seems to be unnecessary in "St. George, Utah, metropolitan area."
  •   Done
  • "In Cane Beds, there are pronghorns and mule deer, and there is land suitable for agriculture." Something about the wording of this feels awkward and it could probably use elaboration anyway, as it's its own paragraph.
  • The story about the nurse's accident in Tourism feels overly lengthy given the section's size. Rather than shorten it, I suggest seeing if any other information about tourism can be found to make the section longer overall to balance it a little.
  • There might be details about the trails themselves, but I've done about as much searching for information as not living in the area allows. Would be appropriate to remove some of the details of the nurse's accident (perhaps to be more equal with the coverage of the similar accident?) - of course, it is the subject of a lot of the news coverage mentioning the town. Kingsif (talk) 21:15, 16 April 2022 (UTC)Reply
  • Calling someone without a WP article a "notable resident" seems like bit of a stretch, even more so when you specify that they only lived there briefly.

That's all I've spotted. Lead is fine. Good work. --An anonymous username, not my real name (talk) 18:21, 16 April 2022 (UTC)Reply


Hmm, I think it's fine as it is after your revisions. Excellent job. --An anonymous username, not my real name (talk) 01:59, 17 April 2022 (UTC)Reply