Talk:Canning Dam

Template

Does anyone know of one that we can work of? --Mdavies 965 (talk) 12:20, 23 November 2008 (UTC)

• Took me a while, but I finally found Template:Infobox dam. It's the one that's used on the Hoover Dam article. Shelbypark (talk) 05:09, 29 November 2008 (UTC)

Another source

This includes some good background on the dam's construction. An article on Canning Contour Channel may also probably be in order. –Moondyne 13:36, 7 December 2008 (UTC)

Yeah i just had a quick skim read and it looks good, Sounds like a good idea on the tunnel though I wouldnt know what to do this is first article --Mdavies 965 (talk) 13:40, 7 December 2008 (UTC)

There's already a stub article on the tunnel -- Canning Tunnel. –Moondyne 13:45, 7 December 2008 (UTC)

sorry i meant the channel :), after doing more reading of the reference i must say i am impressed lots on info both for this article and for the channel, a new article is probley in order as it served a majority of Perth's water needs up until the 1970's. --Mdavies 965 (talk) 12:09, 8 December 2008 (UTC)

Lead section

The article is looking really good and I'm hoping that it will pass GA pretty quickly. My main concern is the lead section - it doesn't really summarise the notable points as per wp:lead such as the enviromental and recreation stuff mentioned in the body text. I'd write it myself, but I'm cr*p at writing introductions. Shelbypark (talk) 06:02, 12 December 2008 (UTC)

Ok i expanded the lead to include those sections. However im not so good either so feel free to re-word at anytime thanks --Mdavies 965 (talk) 08:01, 12 December 2008 (UTC)

Channel article

Is sandboxed at User:Moondyne/CCC, but I'm waiting for some material from my library which I wanted to see before putting that out there. It may be another week or so. –Moondyne 03:45, 19 December 2008 (UTC)

Sounds good, if your feeling up to it we could try and get it to GA class for the GA drive, as for this article I think its looking pretty good for the review to which i am patiently waiting for but suggestions for improvement would be welcome --Mdavies 965 (talk) 10:19, 19 December 2008 (UTC)

Thanks. CCC needs more sources before going there, as well as content on things like its route and the treatment plant at Gosnells. I'll keep at it but don't really see it being at GA anytime soon. –Moondyne 12:55, 19 December 2008 (UTC)

Now at Canning Contour Channel. –Moondyne 11:51, 29 December 2008 (UTC)

Comment

The article has really improved since I peer reviewed it a few weeks ago. Well done to all those who have worked on it.

There is just one thing which I neglected to mention in my review that editors might wish to address. In the lead section there is a sentence, [i]t is noted for its innovative structural and hydraulic design that was considered to be at the forefront of concrete gravity dam design at the time of construction. This is an important point of interest that needs expanding upon in the main body of the article if any of you have any information about it. DeepestGreen[talk] 10:34, 19 December 2008 (UTC)

I have to agree with the above, and I think more could me made of the statistics R/T height, span, width etc compared to other dams at the time and current dams. The Day and AHDB articles (amongst others) provide some of this information. Shelbypark (talk) 12:07, 19 December 2008 (UTC)

Desal plant water

The ABC news source is a bit vague as to whether the pumping of water back into CD is happening, or just a possibility. Is there some better detail on this? It seems a bit odd to be saying "The reservoir can also be used to store excess water ..." without context or detail. –Moondyne 13:02, 19 December 2008 (UTC)

I have found another vague source but so far I havent found anything concrete —Preceding unsigned comment added by Mdavies 965 (talk • contribs) 23:30, 19 December 2008 (UTC)

The second, added reference was the same as the first, so I've removed it. I have reworded the sentence to more accurately reflect the content of the reference. Shelbypark (talk) 05:28, 20 December 2008 (UTC)

Can only find internal documents not publicly published.~~

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notes

• http://nla.gov.au/nla.news-article26351479 1911 proposal Gnangarra 13:20, 22 October 2017 (UTC)

GA Reassessment

The following discussion is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.

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This discussion is transcluded from Talk:Canning Dam/GA3. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the reassessment.

This article does not currently meet the well-written, verifiable or broad in its coverage criteria. Specific issues are as follows:

• Large amounts of text with no citations.
• Use of phrases that have become outdated such as "newly completed" or "Recently".
• "state of the art" is wording that should be avoided.
• Short paragraphs, some only one sentence long, hinder readability.
• "and the work was completed on schedule to a date that was calculated seven years previously." This is hard to understand and does not make sense.
• "loss of linkage". This is poor writing.
• "Periodic flooding of the Canning River from the dam is required to disperse seed, stimulate germination and ensure seedlings survive". Seedlings of what types of plant?
• Some of this feels like its written about the Canning catchment rather than the Canning Dam. Why is the highest point in the catchment important for example.

Steelkamp (talk) 16:16, 6 January 2023 (UTC)

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