Talk:Cape Verde at the 2008 Summer Olympics

Latest comment: 10 years ago by NickGibson3900 in topic GA Review

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Reviewer: Miyagawa (talk · contribs) 18:58, 12 October 2014 (UTC)Reply


I might as well make it an African treble and review this one at the same time as Benin. Miyagawa (talk) 18:58, 12 October 2014 (UTC)Reply

  • Lead
  • You've inserted citation 2 in the middle of a sentence - but also at the end of the same sentence. Therefore I think you can just remove the one in the middle to tidy things up.
  • Background
  • There's some duplication at the start as you mention the debut twice. I would suggest changing "Cape Verde made their olympic debut in 1996, sending three athletes to the games" to "At its debut games in 1996, it sent three athletes". Then you could semi-merge it with the following line by saying that it was the most number of athletes, something that it repeated at the 2004 and 2012 Summer Games.
  • Gymnastics
  • As with the other article, the line "2008 was Monteiro second Olympic Games after competing in the Individual all-round in 2004." should be reworded to avoid starting a sentence with a number.

Overall, the article is a bit short. But I think there's only so much information you can give on two athletes from a single nation, neither of which had multiple rounds in which they competed. Miyagawa (talk) 21:59, 12 October 2014 (UTC)Reply

@Miyagawa: Thanks for the review. I have implemented all your selections - NickGibson3900 Talk 04:51, 13 October 2014 (UTC)Reply