Talk:Capture of Saint Vincent/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Jim Sweeney (talk · contribs) 16:51, 15 December 2011 (UTC)

GA review (see here for criteria)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

   y

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

   y

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Comments

The info box is a bit lop sided any details of British ships for the strength section and I presume the men were from the Royal American Regiment which could be added

The British ships were merchants, sources don't give details. Considering the lopsided forces involved, I don't think it's a problem that the infobox is also lopsided... Magic♪piano 04:18, 17 December 2011 (UTC)

The lead could be reworded to get rid of one of more control/controlled British controlled West Indies isle of Saint Vincent, and quickly gained control over much of the island, assisted by the local Black Caribs who already controlled Rephrased Magic♪piano 04:18, 17 December 2011 (UTC)

Both leaders were subjected inquiries over the surrender. - does not read right Fixed Magic♪piano 04:18, 17 December 2011 (UTC)

The capture section has a cite needed tag Fixed Magic♪piano 04:18, 17 December 2011 (UTC)

The invasion force wa sunder the command of Lieutenant Charles Marie de Trolong du Rumain but later it say a small company under Captain Laroque-Persin was landed - as a captain out ranks a lieutenant this needs clarification Clarified du Rumain was a naval lieutenant with overall command; Laroque was an army officer. Magic♪piano 04:18, 17 December 2011 (UTC)

In the aftermath section which he captured by storm on 5 July. is a bit archaic suggest changing storm but it is only a suggestion Removed "by storm" Magic♪piano 04:18, 17 December 2011 (UTC)

Ludlum, David M. (1963). presumably does not have an ISBN but a OCLC number can be added to remain consistant with the other publications. Fixed Magic♪piano 04:18, 17 December 2011 (UTC)

On hold

Well done some small points for an article this size. I've put the article on hold for seven days to allow folks to address the issues I've brought up. Feel free to contact me on my talk page, or here with any concerns, and let me know one of those places when the issues have been addressed. If I may suggest that you strike out, check mark, or otherwise mark the items I've detailed, that will make it possible for me to see what's been addressed, and you can keep track of what's been done and what still needs to be worked on.Jim Sweeney (talk) 00:59, 17 December 2011 (UTC)

Thank you for taking the time to review; I think I've addressed your issues. Magic♪piano 04:18, 17 December 2011 (UTC)

Fine GA passed Jim Sweeney (talk) 04:28, 17 December 2011 (UTC)