Talk:Capture of Wurst Farm/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Sturmvogel 66 (talk · contribs) 03:28, 1 July 2015 (UTC)

I'll get to this shortly.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 03:28, 1 July 2015 (UTC)

• Sorry for taking so long to get to this.
• No DABs, external links OK
• Images properly licensed.
• Needs some photos of combatants
  • Looking--Tomandjerry211 (alt) (talk) 17:41, 16 July 2015 (UTC)
• Can you modify the detailed maps to show the front line at the time? Don't know how
• Lede a bit too detailed. Shorten it to 2 paras or so.
• Who's Fifth Army? Link it as well. Done
• Tell the reader that the 4th Army is German, and move its link there. Done
• at the front of the main zone had fallen since the Battle of Pilckem Ridge Awkward, passive writing. It hadn't been given away; it "had been captured".
• Briefly explain about the function of Eingrief divisions. Done
• Lossberg the 4th Army Chief of Staff, comma after Lossberg.  Done
• If you're going to red link something, do it at first use. And make sure that all links are at first use.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 20:17, 14 July 2015 (UTC)
• Awkward: The Fifth Army made several minor attacks in September with little success and were suspended but smaller local operations continued. Done
• Before the main attack, the 58th Trench Mortar Battery fired twenty shots at a pillbox and had ten hits. significance? Done
• What the regiment of the 2nd/4th London Battalion? and 2/6 Rifles? Done
• Platoons and sections had all been given geographical objectives, such as pillboxes and emplacements; as they were outflanked the occupants surrendered and 301 Germans were taken prisoner. Rephrase to something like that 301 German defenders surrendered as their defensive works were outflanked. Done
• What's an outpost group? Done
• 59th (2nd North Midland) Division (59th Division) Typo, I presume? No, abbreviation clarifiedKeith-264 (talk) 06:37, 21 July 2015 (UTC)
• Not sure if the summary of Polygon Wood is necessary.
• Move the note about Chinese attacks right after that phrase where a reader will immediately see it. I missed it on my first read through. Done--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 20:17, 14 July 2015 (UTC)
  • Bracketed it instead of notingKeith-264 (talk) 07:06, 21 July 2015 (UTC)

Some comments

I just wanted to add a few comments. Not sure if they are useful / necessary at this point. Hamish59 (talk) 10:34, 24 July 2015 (UTC)

• In the infobox, German Commander is Erich Ludendorff. Would the 36th Division / Corps / 4th Army commander be more appropriate?
• In infobox, German causalties "up to 50 percent". 50% of what? What sort of numbers?
• 55th (West Lancashire) Infantry Division should be 55th (West Lancashire) Division for consistency with 51st (Highland) Division and 58th (2/1st London) Division
• Would linking to Fritz von Lossberg be worthwhile?
• Winnipeg / Winnipeg cross-roads / Winnipeg crossroads needs consistency.
• What is Springfield?
• On battalions of the London Regiment
  • 2nd/4th Battalion London Regiment should be 2/4th Battalion, London Regiment
  • Need to correct 2/5th London Rifle Brigade - not part of the Rifle Brigade. Should be 5th (City of London) Battalion, London Regiment (London Rifle Brigade) in full, so 2/5th Battalion, London Regiment (London Rifle Brigade) or 2/5th London Rifle Brigade
  • 2/6th Rifle Brigade wrong. Should be 6th (City of London) Battalion, London Regiment (City of London Rifles) in full, so perhaps 2/6th City of London Rifles or 2/6th London Regiment (City of London Rifles)
  • Need to pick a consistent format to designate the battalions
• Over linking to Post Office Rifles
• Linking 1st Tank Brigade to Royal Tank Regiment is not correct, I think. How about [[E battalion|Royal Tank Regiment]] or [[E battalion|5th Royal Tank Regiment]]. I guess we need a 1st Tank Brigade article or something similar at some point. Surprised we do not have one yet - surely the world's first armoured formation?
• 26 September section: need link to Second Army? Ditto 3rd Division.
• The 58th Division had 1,236 casualties seems odd to my eyes. The 58th Division suffered 1,236 casualties perhaps?