Talk:Caryodendron orinocense

Latest comment: 4 years ago by Chiswick Chap in topic GA Review


GA Review

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Reviewer: Chiswick Chap (talk · contribs) 19:53, 9 April 2020 (UTC) I'll have a go at this one. Chiswick Chap (talk) 19:53, 9 April 2020 (UTC)Reply

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This is a well-organized and well-cited article on a tree species.

  • "used for nutritional and cosmetic purposes" - why not say "is edible, and can be used in cosmetics".
    •   Done. Change to "which is edible and is also used in cosmetics."
  • Image captions don't need a "." at the end unless they are full sentences (5 to remove).
    •   Done
  • "nut by-products" - this means the pressed cake once the oil has been extracted? Better say so.
    •   Done
  • "high contents in proteins" - "high content of proteins" might be better.
    •   Done
  • "even when the plan shows callus growth" - does "plan" mean "cutting" here? Better say so.
    • That was a spelling mistake. "plan" means "plant". Corrected.
  • "an allurement for bees" - perhaps "to attract bees".
    •   Done. Changed to "Furthermore, the tree also attracts bees through the nectar excreted from its leaves, aiding in the tree's pollination."
  • "autochthonous" - I did Greek but many readers won't have. I think we usually use "resident" here.
    •   Done
  • "displays a dense and leafy crown" should be "has a dense and leafy crown".
    •   Done
  • "The species displays recalcitrant seed," - better would be "The seeds are recalcitrant," linked as now.
  • " exhibits periodic shedding" should be "is periodically shed".
    •   Done
  • I'm a bit doubtful about the 'Ecological value' section: don't these advantages apply to almost ANY local tree species? It's an error to claim specific benefits when general benefits are all that apply.
    • Reduced scope of "ecological value" section to retain specificity to only this species, and not to all indigenous trees. Let me know if you agree with these changes.
  • Images: all fine. Nice to see your own photos in service!

That's about it from me.

Glad to hear it, thanks for letting me know. Chiswick Chap (talk) 06:47, 17 April 2020 (UTC)Reply
Many thanks for the work, and the fine article. Promoting now. I do hope you'll feel able to take the time to review one or two articles from the GAN queue. Chiswick Chap (talk) 09:12, 18 April 2020 (UTC)Reply