Talk:Cat Daddy/GA2

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Reviewer: AJona1992 (talk · contribs) 00:43, 18 June 2012 (UTC)

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• "Cat Daddy" is a 2010 song by The Rej3ctz and an eponymous dance. - why would you want to start off the sentence like this? Maybe saying "Cat Daddy" is a song recorded by American recording artist The Rej3ctz or American rap band since there is not article based on them on Wikipedia. For this the single makes me wonder if it meets the criteria.
• Saying that the dance is "notable" is POV-ish and the sentence that follows it borders WP:OR. Why is the dance notable? You give no reason but saying Chris Brown had done a version of it, this does not make it notable.
• The lead alone needs work. Please check other GA song articles for a model article. Sentences like this one "It was released as a music download on February 16, 2011 on iTunes and charted on several Billboard charts, including fourteen weeks on the Hot R&B/Hip-Hop Songs, after being re-released on June 27, 2011." needs work. First off the sentence is too big. "It was released as a music download..." try saying "It was released for digital download". Another sentence "charted on several Billboard charts, including fourteen weeks on the Hot R&B/Hip-Hop Songs," which charts did it peak? What was the peak positions for the song?
• The official video has had over 70 million YouTube views. needs to be in present-tense tone
• The song and dance became topical again due to a viral video in May 2012 when reigning Sports Illustrated Swimsuit Issue cover model Kate Upton posted a video of her bikini-clad rendition of the dance on YouTube and YouTube temporarily banned the video. another long sentence. This sentence "became topical again" is not very grammatical and "reigning" sounds POVish.
• I'm going to quick-fail this article as it needs further fixings. Please tell me how YouTube is a WP:RS? Try fixing these issues and others like it in the article and post it at WP:PR and at WP:GOCE/REQ before nominating again. Best, Jonayo! ^{Selena 4 ever} 22:53, 19 June 2012 (UTC)