Talk:Ceredigion/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 12:01, 17 April 2016 (UTC)

Will do this shortly. JAGUAR  12:01, 17 April 2016 (UTC)

Initial comments

• "The county is mainly rural with large parts being hill or mountain land" - how about hilly? Feel free to ignore this if you don't like it

Done. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 13:35, 17 April 2016 (UTC)

• The third paragraph of the lead is lacking links. Try linking silver, zinc, or EU

Done. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 13:35, 17 April 2016 (UTC)

• "More recently, the population has started rising again as elderly people move into the county for a peaceful retirement" - not sure if 'peaceful retirement' sounds informal to use here, I would just rephrase to for retirement

Done. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 13:35, 17 April 2016 (UTC)

• "where Rugby, Northampton and London were important destinations" - link Rugby, Warwickshire and Northampton

Done. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 13:35, 17 April 2016 (UTC)

• "Cardiganshire had a substantial population in the early modern period" - why the use of 'Cardiganshire' now? I've seen Ceredigion been used throughout the rest of the article

The word "Ceredigion" refers to a historic kingdom and to the present county (since 1996). At all other times, the county was known as Cardiganshire. I have edited the article to tried to rationalise this. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 13:35, 17 April 2016 (UTC)

• "Another factor was that the great landed estates of the county, which for so long had dominated the politics of the count" - I don't understand this

Rephrased to clarify. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 13:35, 17 April 2016 (UTC)

• "the British Government realised" - I don't think 'government' needs to be capitalised

Done. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 13:35, 17 April 2016 (UTC)

• "The River Teifi is a renowned salmon fishing river" - link River Teifi

Done. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 13:35, 17 April 2016 (UTC)

• "A bus service known as "Bwcabus" operates in the south of the county offering customised transport to rural dwellers" - 'dwellers' refer to people, so "transporting to people" sounds a bit wrong. Should this be either dwellings (rural houses) or transport for rural dwellers?

Done. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 13:35, 17 April 2016 (UTC)

• Ref 14 redirects to the main page

Not sure about this, which reference do you mean? Cwmhiraeth (talk) 13:35, 17 April 2016 (UTC)

The toolserver picked up that ref 14 was a redirect, but I've checked it myself and it should be OK. Might be an error on the toolserver's part. JAGUAR  14:04, 17 April 2016 (UTC)

• DAB links OK

Nor this. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 13:35, 17 April 2016 (UTC)

Disambiguation links. I check for them in every review, and didn't find any here JAGUAR  14:04, 17 April 2016 (UTC)

Excellent work with this article! I enjoyed reading it. I found a couple of things that confused me, but once all of the above are clarified then this should be good to go. JAGUAR  12:22, 17 April 2016 (UTC)

Thanks for taking on this review. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 13:35, 17 April 2016 (UTC)

Thanks for addressing them, with all of the issues clarified this looks good to go now. JAGUAR  14:04, 17 April 2016 (UTC)