Talk:Chandler Stephenson/GA1

Latest comment: 2 years ago by GhostRiver in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: GhostRiver (talk · contribs) 23:19, 4 December 2021 (UTC)Reply


I'll be taking a look at this! — GhostRiver 23:19, 4 December 2021 (UTC)Reply

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Criteria: 1a. prose ( ) 1b. MoS ( ) 2a. ref layout ( ) 2b. cites WP:RS ( ) 2c. no WP:OR ( ) 2d. no WP:CV ( )
3a. broadness ( ) 3b. focus ( ) 4. neutral ( ) 5. stable ( ) 6a. free or tagged images ( ) 6b. pics relevant ( )
Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked   are unassessed

Infobox and lede

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  • Mention in first sentence that he previously played for the Caps   Done
  • Per MOS:SEAOFBLUE, any "city, state" or "city, province" should be one link (to the city) and not two split; this applies to Saskatoon in both the infobox and lede   Done
  • and in the midget hockey looks like a couple words are missing   Done
  • Don't need to include WHL in parentheses if it's only used once   Done
  • Overall could be expanded: my unofficial system is one paragraph for childhood & juniors (or college), one for professional   Done

Early life

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  • Comma after "hockey playing family"   Done
  • Spell out "National Hockey League" with the acronym in parentheses after the first instance   Done
  • Name for the brother?   Done
  • Link concussion   Done

Playing career

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Amateur

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  • "and in the midget hockey" looks like you forgot a few words there, huh?   Done
  • he was signed with either "was signed by" or "signed with" works   Done
  • Turns out we actually have a link for WHL Bantam Draft   Done
  • The WHL acronym should be introduced at some point   Done
  • During the offseason prior to his rookie season A little dense   Done
  • What was his main focus with the personal trainer, etc., if it was mentioned?
  • Comma after "at the World U-17 Hockey Challenge"   Done
  • Link the first instances of "goals" and "assists"   Done
  • "Due to this, he was scratched for the Pats' first five games following the tournament." → "The injury also caused him to miss his first five WHL games after the tournament ended"   Done
  • Link the first instance of "points"   Done
  • There should be an apostrophe in "previous seasons", either "season's" or "seasons'" depending on whether you're describing one or all of them
  • Spell out and link first instance of CHL (not in Top Prospects Game, in "amongst CHL players")   Done

Washington Capitals

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  • Comma after "the Hershey Bears"   Done
  • "on an amateur try-out and made his professional debut at for the tail end" to reduce repetition with "He made his AHL debut" in the next sentence   Done
  • "to participate in the Capitals' 2014 rookie camp"   Done
  • "after registering one assist" in how many AHL games?
  • Comma after "In his first two games with the Capitals"
  • "Upon joining the Bears" → "Upon rejoining the Bears"   Done
  • I think I was at the game that broke his drought...
  • Capitals' bottom-six forwards line I mean, technically those are two lines
  • an average of 87:20 on the penalty kill An average of 87 minutes per game?!
    • GhostRiver, per the article: Stephenson logged 87:20 of shorthanded time on ice this season Was 3 on 3 OT introduced at this time? because it could also be that....it could also just be a typo ¯\_(ツ)_/¯ 05:27, 30 December 2021 (UTC)
  • Comma after "in the conference finals"   Done
  • Comma after "Humboldt, Saskatchewan" per MOS:GEOCOMMA   Done
  • "in 64 games during the 2018–19 season." (Then delink in the next sentence)   Done
  • "played alongside new teammates often" → "often played alongside new teammates"   Done
  • "attributed his decline in production due to his mental health"   Done
  • Possessive for "six of the Capitals' seven"   Done

Golden Knights

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  • This section should be titled Vegas Golden Knights to parallel Washington Capitals   Done
  • Lowercase and link general manager   Done
  • "15-5" → "15–5"   Done
  • "linemates as they suffered from injuries" → "linemates, who had both been injured early in the season" (checked against source)   Done

Awards and honours

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  • Specify "Stanley Cup champion"   Done

References

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  • The following should be reclassified from "publisher" to "work":
    • Star Phoenix (Saskatoon StarPhoenix)   Done
    • Regina Leader-Post   Done
    • The Patriot-News   Done
    • Las Vegas Review-Journal   Done

General comments

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  • Pictures look good
  • No stability concerns in the revision history
  • Earwig score looks good, top result is a mirror site

FINALLY putting this one on hold. As always, ping me if you have any questions, and let me know when you're finished. Thank you for your patience. — GhostRiver 15:58, 28 December 2021 (UTC)Reply