Talk:Charles H. Eglee

Latest comment: 14 years ago by 76.65.21.42 in topic Opening Paragraph - too crowded

Opening Paragraph - too crowded

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The introduction paragraph is bulky. Needs to be condensed and paraphrased. Shouldn't be more than a few brief sentences. No one wants a life story in the opening paragraph. —Preceding unsigned comment added by 76.65.21.42 (talk) 05:21, 27 November 2009 (UTC)Reply