Talk:Charles Irving (surgeon)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 10:38, 6 October 2021 (UTC)

Comments

• "fl. 1768-1781" per MOS this should almost certainly be "fl. 1768–1781"

  Dashes changed throughout.

• "British Navy" do you mean Royal Navy?

  Fixed.

• "£5,000" inflate.

  Done, hope the precision works.

• "(c. 1738-1800[1])" Should be an en-dash.

  Fixed.

• " Dumfriesshire,[4]" might be worth stating this is in Scotland here, as it's not a commonly known location.

  Added.

• "how he became" how Charles Irving became (last "he" was his brother).

  Fixed.

• "Olaudah Equiano, 1789" not informative caption, perhaps explain why he's relevant here.

  I've removed the image.

• "to the British Navy in" again, you mean Royal Navy.

  Yes.

• "in 1770.[8] In January 1771" repetitive.

  Reformulated.

• "the Admiralty" link.

  Done.

• "James Lind, Lind " repetitive.

  It's "the latter" now, but better suggestions welcome.

• First Lord of the Admiralty link.

  Done

• "Joseph Priestley tasted" context, i.e. "The scientist Joseph..." or similar.

  Added

• "but ... wanted" non-breaking space between "but" and the ellipsis.

  Done.

• "the large sum of £5,000" remove "the large sum of" and inflate.

  Done, same precision as above.

• First Sec -> Permanent Secretary to the Admiralty.

  Linking through redirect in case the article is ever split.

• "Phipps' 1774" sadly, we now insist on "Phipps's"

  Made worse.

• "but Lord ..., but to ..." repetitive.

  Improved.

• "guardacostas" link? Or do we simply mean "coast guards"?

  I think they were privateers. I haven't found the best possible link yet, will report back or footnote. May have been more or less coast guards, unlike the privateers of 50 years earlier. (some sources if I need them later: [1], [2], [3]). I just put "(coast guards)" after guarda costas for now.

• "lost a sum of £3,723" delete "a sum of" and inflate.

  Done.

• "1779-1781," en-dash.

  Done.

• "1791 Statistical Account of Scotland " Accounts

  No. The first book is just called The Statistical Account of Scotland.

• Hoare source, en-dash in year range.

  Done.

• No geographical categories, even "People from Scotland" or similar?

  Added People from Dumfries and Galloway.

That's all I have. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 07:27, 11 October 2021 (UTC)

• Thank you very much The Rambling Man, I think I got everything. —Kusma (talk) 20:45, 11 October 2021 (UTC)