Talk:Charles Matthews (basketball)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 12:08, 29 January 2018 (UTC)

Will read through this article and give comments soon. MWright96 (talk) 12:08, 29 January 2018 (UTC)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Early life

• Split off the paragraph into two at the point Matthews signed his letter of intent so it is not uncomfortable to read
  • O.K.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 17:16, 31 January 2018 (UTC)
• "In his youth basketball took a backseat to the trombone and skateboard, but he began to take basketball seriously the summer before his high school freshman year" - {{xt|In his youth, he played the trombone and skateboard, but started taking basketball seriously in the summer before his school freshman year."
  • Thx.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 17:18, 31 January 2018 (UTC)
• "He committed to John Calipari and Kentucky on February 26, 2014 during his junior year." - reword this sentence so it reads as follows: Matthews committed to playing basketball with John Calipri and the Kentucky Wildcats on February 26, 2014 during his junior year.
  • Done.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 17:21, 31 January 2018 (UTC)
• "Matthews was the first commit for Kentucky's 2015 class." - Matthews was the first to commit to playing basketball for Kentucky's 2015 class.
  • O.K.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 17:24, 31 January 2018 (UTC)
• "Matthews earned tournament MVP." - Hence, Matthew earned the tournament's Most Valuable Player (MVP) award.
  • Done without the Hence, because there is no content to support it. Hence would require documentation of a superlative performance in the preceding sentences.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 17:27, 31 January 2018 (UTC)
• "He officially signed his National Letter of Intent on National Signing Day, November 22, 2014."
  • I don't understand this point.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 03:47, 1 February 2018 (UTC)
• "for the 21–8 St. Rita's team that was eliminated from the 2014 IHSA Class 4A playoffs by the Jahlil Okafor-led Whitney M. Young Magnet High School team." - repetition of "team"
  • I am just going along here, but I removed the 2nd use of the word.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 03:49, 1 February 2018 (UTC)
• "During Matthews four-year high school" - Matthews'
  • Thx.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 03:51, 1 February 2018 (UTC)
• "Following his senior season, he was a first team Associated Press Class 4A All-state selection." - After his senior season, he was a selection for the Associated Press' Class-4A All-State first team.
  • O.K.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD)

Kentucky

• "Matthews three starts" - same issue as the second to last one in the early life sub-section
  • Thanks.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 05:58, 1 February 2018 (UTC)
• "against #16 ranked Louisville." - No. 16
  • I have written dozens of WP:CBBALL articles and I have never used No.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 05:59, 1 February 2018 (UTC)
    • We can gloss over that query then. MWright96 (talk) 18:30, 18 February 2018 (UTC)

Michigan

• "Following the season he had a medical procedure on his hip." - is there any information that says why he had a medical procedure on his hip?
• "He served on the scout team for the 2016–17 Michigan Wolverines men's basketball team." - reptition of "team"
  • O.K.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 19:06, 1 February 2018 (UTC)
• "He posted career-highs of 28 points and 8 rebounds in the first round of the 2017 Maui Invitational Tournament on November 20 against LSU" - Matthews posted career-highs of 28 points and eight rebounds in the first round game of the 2017 Maui Invitational Tournament against LSU on November 20
  • O.K.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 21:45, 7 February 2018 (UTC)
• "The following night he" add a comma between night and he
  • Thx.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 05:30, 2 February 2018 (UTC)
• "Since Moe Wagner added 21 points and 10 rebounds the team" - same issue as above but with the words "rebounds" and "the" this time
  • Thx.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 05:32, 2 February 2018 (UTC)
• "On December 21, Michigan handed the previously winless Alabama A&M Bulldogs a 97–47 defeat" - On December 21, Michigan was defeated by the previously Alabama A&M Bulldogs in a 97-47 defeat
  • O.K.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 17:59, 2 February 2018 (UTC)
• "as Matthews posted another career high with 31 points." - as Matthews posted 31 points, another career high.
  • O.K.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 05:34, 2 February 2018 (UTC)

Personal

• I'd personally move the names of his parents to make it the first sentence of this section and put his siblings after that
  • Done.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 04:20, 8 February 2018 (UTC)

References

• CBS Sports in reference 5 should be moved to the publisher field
• ESPN needs to be moved to the publisher field in reference 13 and do the same with rivals.com and 247sports.com in the next two citations
• The Author is needed in Reference 12.
  • Have done the third query myself. MWright96 (talk) 18:30, 18 February 2018 (UTC)

Those are all the issues I found during my read-through of this article. Going to put this review on hold. MWright96 (talk) 15:34, 29 January 2018 (UTC)

• Okay think this article can now be promoted to GA class. MWright96 (talk) 18:30, 18 February 2018 (UTC)