Talk:Children of Earth and Sky

Latest comment: 3 years ago by SL93 in topic Did you know nomination

Did you know nomination

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The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.

The result was: promoted by SL93 (talk21:15, 13 November 2021 (UTC)Reply

Moved to mainspace by Mindmatrix (talk). Self-nominated at 23:52, 1 November 2021 (UTC).Reply

Thanks, tweaked again per your comment, how does it look now? Gatoclass (talk) 15:03, 2 November 2021 (UTC)Reply
Looks good. Mindmatrix 15:07, 2 November 2021 (UTC)Reply
  •   Article is new and long enough, neutrally written and plagiarism free. The hook is cited and of acceptable interest. The given QPQ is very old, dating back to 2019, but I will WP:AGF that it is legit. My one quibble is that a sentence in the plot section is uncited. Also if you wouldn't mind Mindmatrix, I would like you to check the hook one last time as I gave it another slight tweak and I want to be sure it is acceptable to you in its current form. Gatoclass (talk) 10:58, 4 November 2021 (UTC)Reply
  • Update: I just belatedly realized the article lacks a critical reception section. Since such sections are standard for works of fiction, the article arguably fails rule D7 of the supplementary rules, so I'd like to see one added. Gatoclass (talk) 12:05, 4 November 2021 (UTC)Reply
@Gatoclass: I've added a reception section, including a number of quotations. Regarding the QPQ (I appreciate the AGF), Special:WhatLinksHere/Template:Did you know nominations/Nydia Blas indicates I've only linked to that review once, and as indicated above, I maintain a tracker for all my DYK work that matches my reviews to my nominations. (I participate in DYK in spurts, and bank QPQs when I get the chance.) Regarding the hook, I was going to make the same change, so it's certainly acceptable. Regarding the unsourced sentence in the plot, I've added a citation to the Review by Hobbs in The Globe and Mail, where he states "...Duke of Seressa (our Venice) is keen to find and fill any power vacuums..."; it's the closest I could find, so if you'd like for me to tweak the phrasing in the article, I'll do so. Mindmatrix 14:56, 4 November 2021 (UTC)Reply
That's a very nice addition Mindmatrix, thank you. With regard to the "power vacuums" quote, it doesn't quite reflect the statement in the article. Have you actually read the book so you know firsthand that the duke seeks to ouster rivals? If so, I will accept the text as is, but if not, I think you should modify the line in question to conform with the source.
My only other concern now, given that this was a very well received book, is that the proposed hook doesn't do justice to it. But now that the article has a well developed reception section, I'm thinking perhaps we could use something from that instead. How about something like:
ALT1: ... that Guy Gavriel Kay, author of Children of Earth and Sky, has been described as "contemporary fiction's finest fantasist"? Gatoclass (talk) 15:01, 5 November 2021 (UTC)Reply
@Gatoclass: I've trimmed "... by ousting weaker nearby rivals" from the offending sentence; is what remains suitable? As far as the hook goes, I'm fine with ALT1. Mindmatrix 15:14, 5 November 2021 (UTC)Reply
Thanks Mindmatrix, I gave the sentence a slight tweak for clarity.
This review is now complete, but since I can't approve a hook of my own, I will have to find somebody to supply the final tick - hopefully it won't take too long. Thanks once again for your patience. Gatoclass (talk) 15:31, 5 November 2021 (UTC)Reply
  Thanks. Redirecting for another reviewer to verify ALT1. Mindmatrix 15:46, 5 November 2021 (UTC)Reply