Talk:Chimera (The X-Files)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: TRLIJC19 (talk · contribs) 18:01, 17 June 2012 (UTC)

 Doing... TRLIJC19 (talk) 18:01, 17 June 2012 (UTC)

I'll read through the article, and list any existent issues below. At a start, there is no reason to quickfail; the article is in seemingly good shape. TRLIJC19 (talk) 18:05, 17 June 2012 (UTC)

Issues

I try to break down the issues in a chronological way, that makes it easy to locate where the issues are, because I know what it's like to get a confusing GA review. If you question or disagree, with an error listed, please leave a note, under the issue, explaining why.

• Lead
  • Paragraph 1
    • This sentence, "It premiered on the Fox network in the United States on April 2, 2000." has multiple issues:
      • There should be a comma after 'United States'.
      • It should be merged with the next sentence, ultimately reading: "It premiered on the Fox network in the United States, on April 2, 2000, was written by David Amann and was directed by Cliff Bole.
    • The end of the last sentence should not have '...', it should have a period.
  • Paragraph 3
    • The first sentence should instead read: "Similar to the season six episode, "Arcadia" [...]". Note the change from "sixth season" to "season six", and the comma after 'episode'.

• Plot
  • Paragraph 1
    • A link to Raven would be helpful in the first sentence.
  • Paragraph 2
    • This sentence, "Mulder later tells him that Martha was pregnant and they he thinks he's the father.", has multiple issues:
      • It should say he is instead of he's. Contractions should not be used, unless it's a quote.
      • It shoud say "and that he thinks he is the father" instead of "and they he thinks he is the father", ultimately reading: "Mulder later tells him that Martha was pregnant and that he thinks he is the father."
  • Paragraph 3
    • This sentence, "Ellen transforms into the creature and attacks Mulder and attempts to drown him in a bath tub, but stops when she sees her monstrous reflection in the water.", should instead read: "Ellen transforms into the creature, attacks Mulder, and attempts to drown him in a bath tub, but stops when she sees her monstrous reflection in the water."

• Production
  • Writing
    • Paragraph 1
      • This sentence, "These themes had previously been explored in the sixth season episode "Arcadia".", should instead read: "These themes had previously been explored in the season six episode, "Arcadia"." Note the change from "sixth season" to "season six", and the comma after 'episode'.
      • This sentence, "Series creator Chris Carter saw the episode as "a chance to do something bold and new."", needs commas after 'creator' and 'Carter'.
    • Paragraph 2
      • This sentence, "Matt Hurwitz and Chris Knowles noted in their book The Complete X-Files that "David Amman's script is an insightful commentary on suburban repression and self-delusion, which made a major comeback in the conservative late '90s."", should have commas after 'book' and 'X-Files'.
  • Casting and filming
    • Paragraph 1
      • This sentence, "Millikan lated noted that "the show necessitated casting perfect people. [...]", should say 'later' instead of 'lated'.
    • Paragraph 2
      • This sentence, "Most of the opening scenes were shot at in a local Los Angeles backyard." has multiple issues:
        • It should say "Most of the opening scenes were shot in a local Los Angeles backyard." Note the deduction of 'at'.
        • It should be merged with the next sentence, ultimately reading: "Most of the opening scenes were shot in a local Los Angeles backyard, however, finding suitable "tree-lined elements" proved difficult." Also note the deduction of 'a' before 'suitable'.
      • This sentence, "The episode ran into several snags during its filming.", should remove the word 'its'.

• Broadcast and reception
  • Paragraph 2
    • This sentence, "Robert Shearman and Lars Pearson, in their book Wanting to Believe: A Critical Guide to The X-Files, Millennium & The Lone Gunmen, rated the episode four stars out of five, calling the script "very stylish"., should have a comma after 'book'.

I am putting the review on hold so the nominator can address the problems. Please fix these issues within seven (7) days and then I'll continue on with the review. If these issues are not fixed within the limit, then the nomination will unfortunately have to be failed. When you fix an issue, please strike through it using this template: <del>Issue to be resolved.</del> When you type that, it will appear like this: Issue to be resolved. Looking forward to finishing the review, TRLIJC19 (talk) 19:21, 17 June 2012 (UTC)

I believe I have addressed all of the issues. Thank you very much for the very thorough review.--Gen. Quon (talk) 19:34, 17 June 2012 (UTC)

Review

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Being that all issues have been corrected, this article now meets the good article criteria, and I'm happy to sign it off. Great job to the nominator and other significant contributors. Cheers, TRLIJC19 (talk) 20:03, 17 June 2012 (UTC)