Talk:Chinese cruiser Zhiyuan/GA1

Latest comment: 7 years ago by Krishna Chaitanya Velaga in topic GA Review

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Reviewer: Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk · contribs) 04:04, 11 January 2017 (UTC)Reply


Will take this one. Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk • mail) 04:04, 11 January 2017 (UTC)Reply

  • Lead;
    • she was Captained by; decapitalize "C"
  • Section 1;
    • Suggest renaming the section as "Design and description"
    • who were known as the leading builder of this type of vessel during this period -> known to be the leading builder of this type of vessels during this period
    • hydraulics is over linked
    • 6-inch (15 cm); remove "-"
    • 2 inches (5.1 cm), 8-inch (20 cm); abbreviate. Also in the infoxbox
    • Captain's cabin; decapitalize "C" and also throughout the article check this issue. "Captain" must be used only when it is used a prefix for the name, for example, Captain Smith, else it just "captain"
  • Section 2;
    • on the 20th; remove "the"
    • What about the commissioning dates?
  • Unfortunately I've got relatively few details about commissioning dates for Chinese ships of this period. I've got no doubt that there were commissioning ceremonies, as there was a keeness to replicate the various Western naval procedures. Miyagawa (talk) 11:54, 14 January 2017 (UTC)Reply
    • William M Lang; is to be "William M. Lang", per MOS:LASTNAME
    • cut short the rank promotion details of Lang, they are out of context
  • Section 2.1;
    • with Zhiyuen and the armored cruiser Jingyuen grouped together -> with Zhiyuen and her sister ship grouped together
    • By 2:00pm -> By 2:00 pm, use nbsp, per MOS:TIME
    • Dingyuan is over linked
    • A flying squadron of Japanese vessels, flying squadron? Do mean aircraft?
    • the armored cruiser Jingyuen;
    • attention to Zhiyuan and the armored cruiser Jingyuen -> attention to Zhiyuan and her sister ship
    • 10 inches (25 centimetres); abbreviate
    • 3:30pm -> 3:30 pm
    • American Philo McGiffin, captain of the Zhenyuan; I believe that Deng is the captain, there is bit confusion in the sentence, please rephrase
    • delete "a large and sometimes vicious animal"
Done. Miyagawa (talk) 11:54, 14 January 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • Section 3;
    • Deng and the Zhiyuan appear in the 2003 Chinese television series; correct the tense
    • two-year-long; drop "-"
Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk • mail) 13:24, 13 January 2017 (UTC)Reply
Thanks for reviewing, I'll get these edits done over the weekend. But I'll get that copyvio fixed right away. It was inherited from the previous version of the article, but it's my own fault as I didn't check it. Miyagawa (talk) 18:14, 13 January 2017 (UTC)Reply
Ok, that's the copyvio fixed. It still comes up as 18%ish, but that's based on a quote. Miyagawa (talk) 18:25, 13 January 2017 (UTC)Reply
@Krishna Chaitanya Velaga: Ok, I think that's everything sorted now. Miyagawa (talk) 11:54, 14 January 2017 (UTC)Reply

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose, spelling, and grammar):   b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):  
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (reference section):   b (citations to reliable sources):   c (OR):   d (copyvio and plagiarism):  
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):   b (focused):  
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:  
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:  
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):   b (appropriate use with suitable captions):  
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:  
    Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk • mail) 03:09, 15 January 2017 (UTC)Reply