Talk:Chitty Chitty Death Bang/GA2

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Reviewer: That Ole Cheesy Dude (Talk to the hand!) 00:08, 29 June 2011 (UTC)Reply

Looks good, a few changes and it's ready to go.

Specific
  • Each first sentence of each paragraph begins with "Chitty Chitty Death Bang", try changing that (it's used 4 times in the lead only).
  • A "1 year old" should be "one-year-old"
  • Nicaragua needs a link
  • "other various characters" various other.
  • "Peter lost his watch of the Dukes of Hazzard." This needs clarification.
Could you be more specific? Pedro J. the rookie 01:33, 29 June 2011 (UTC)Reply
Well, what does it mean for one? It doesn't seem to make a lot of sense to me. That Ole Cheesy Dude (Talk to the hand!) 03:20, 29 June 2011 (UTC)Reply
  • "When Stewie is packing he takes a bag of Cheerios with him" How is that a reference. Should be removed.
  • "called said that" Doesn't make sense. One or the other
  • Also the sentence with "called said that" in it needs quote marks.
  • Again tv.yahoo is not a very reliable source.
Again? Well anyway, I disagree since the page is owned by Yahoo, but in any case I added a TV Guide link. Pedro J. the rookie 01:33, 29 June 2011 (UTC)Reply
TV Guide is an even more unreliable source, remove it. I'll accept the Yahoo one, begrudgingly. That Ole Cheesy Dude (Talk to the hand!) 03:20, 29 June 2011 (UTC)Reply
Everything else is taken care of. Pedro J. the rookie 01:33, 29 June 2011 (UTC)Reply
General
  • The cultural references section reads like a list of trivia.


  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose):   (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):  
    A few changes needed here and there, room for improvement.
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references):   (citations to reliable sources):   (OR):  
    Pretty good overall, just one unreliable ref.
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):   (focused):  
    Perfic'
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:  
    Perfic'
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:  
    Perfic'.
  6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales):   (appropriate use with suitable captions):  
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:  
Okay that's a pass, good job working on this.   That Ole Cheesy Dude (Talk to the hand!) 00:25, 30 June 2011 (UTC)Reply