Talk:Christian Geiger/GA1

Latest comment: 10 years ago by Jaguar in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 21:41, 2 April 2014 (UTC)Reply

I'll take up this review too. Judging by the size of this article it won't take long and if it makes GA it could be one of the shortest. I'll leave down some initial comments within 48 hours as I have another GAR before this. I could review this one first to get it out of the way... I focus on copyediting issues. Thanks Jaguar 21:41, 2 April 2014 (UTC)Reply

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

  1. Is it reasonably well written?
    A. Prose quality:  
    B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:  
  2. Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
    A. References to sources:  
    It is well referenced.
    B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:  
    C. No original research:  
  3. Is it broad in its coverage?
    A. Major aspects:  
    B. Focused:  
  4. Is it neutral?
    Fair representation without bias:  
  5. Is it stable?
    No edit wars, etc:  
  6. Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
    A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:  
    B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:  
  7. Overall:
    Pass or Fail:  

Sorry for the delay, it won't happen again as I'm not busy any more.

Initial comments

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Lead

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  • The lead is far too short for GA material - just like Toby Kane, perhaps this could be expanded to explain his career?
  • "He was Jessica Gallagher's guide skier at the 2014 Winter Paralympics in Sochi, winning a bronze medal.[1]" - if the lead is expanded then it would be in best practise to remove/relocate this reference to the main article per WP:LEAD and most other GAs!

Personal

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  • "Geiger was born on 29 March 1988 in Australia, but lived in Austria until he was eight." - is there any information on where he was born? And both countries should be linked! (Australia, Austria)
  • "He suffered severe injuries to his arm, spleen and liver as well as serious brain trauma, and was in an induced coma for a week" - grammatically this isn't great, how about He suffered severe injuries to his arm, spleen and liver as well as serious brain trauma. As a result, was in an induced coma for a week
  • "It was months before he could walk, talk and eat by himself again" - I'm worried about the quality of this sentence - how about It took months before he could walk, talk and eat independently

Skiing

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  • Not important, but do you think this section could be renamed 'Career' or should it be left as Skiing as it is his only career?
    • By using "Skiing", the articles are consistent with each other.
  • While the prose is generally good, could this section be expanded slightly to mention more of his career? As part of the GA criteria, length isn't a problem but the scale of the content is. I think this section (and the lead) could do with more content?

On hold

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There are a few problems before this can be promoted to GA, the most important concern is that the lead and Skiing section could be expanded a little to mention more of his career? I'll put this on hold for seven days and if all f those issues I have mentioned above will be addressed then this article should have no problem passing the GAN! Jaguar 10:46, 12 April 2014 (UTC)Reply

Close - promoted

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Well done on all the work. The prose has improved and the length issue has been addressed to - the lead has definitely improved and for the size of this article the biography and the career is as extensive as it can be. It now meets the GA criteria. Thank you for addressing those points so quickly! Jaguar 18:25, 13 April 2014 (UTC)Reply