Talk:Chrysler Turbine Car/GA1

Latest comment: 6 years ago by Eric Corbett in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Eric Corbett (talk · contribs) 02:27, 11 January 2018 (UTC)Reply

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1. Well-written:
  1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct.
  1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation.
2. Verifiable with no original research:
  2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline.
  2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose).
  2c. it contains no original research.
  2d. it contains no copyright violations or plagiarism.
3. Broad in its coverage:
  3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic.
  3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style).
  4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each.
  5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.
6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio:
  6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content.
  6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions.
  7. Overall assessment.


Detailed comments

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Lead

  • The (rather short) lead doesn't adequately summarise the article. For instance, there's nothing about user feedback, performance, fuel economy, or failure to meet emission controls.

Engine

  • "The car was powered by the A-831 ..." What car are we talking about?
  • "The engine produced 130 hp (97 kW) ... It produced 130 brake horsepower (97 kW) ..." Are we not saying the same thing twice here? Why hp and bhp?

Legacy

  • "One, owned by Frank Kleptz of Fort Wayne, Indiana ... sold to Kleptz in Hershey, Pennsylvania." I don't think I follow that. Why is relevant where he bought the car anyway?
  • "The second, owned by comedian and television host Jay Leno, who purchased one of the three Chrysler Turbine Cars originally retained by the company in 2009." That sentence doesn't really work.
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