Talk:Clare Nott/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 16:50, 27 July 2013 (UTC)

Comments

• Lead does not adequately summarise the article.
• Where is Burzynski referenced?
  • Y Added. Hawkeye7 (talk) 22:19, 1 August 2013 (UTC)
• "She was born on 11 August " -> "Nott was ..."
  • Y Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 22:19, 1 August 2013 (UTC)
• "In her downtime, she cooks and watches MasterChef Australia" this is a little trivial really. Nothing better than this?
  • Y Removed. Hawkeye7 (talk) 22:19, 1 August 2013 (UTC)
• Personal section: "she" nine times in a row. Not good.
  • Y Re-worded. Hawkeye7 (talk)!
• When starting new sections, reinforce her name, i.e. Nott is... rather than She is...
  • Y Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 22:19, 1 August 2013 (UTC)
• Image caption isn't correct, she's waiting to be given the ball before a throw-in.
  • Y Corrected. Hawkeye7 (talk) 22:19, 1 August 2013 (UTC)
• Statistics table needs work, needs WP:DASH compliance, why the spaced hyphens? Why the blank cells?
• Once again, non-experts have no idea who the Gliders are.
  • Y Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 22:19, 1 August 2013 (UTC)
• "Gliders lost 44-58" en-dash for scorelines.
  • Y Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 01:07, 3 August 2013 (UTC)
• What are the three hyphens (---) doing?
  • Y A bot artefact. Corrected. Updated bot. Hawkeye7 (talk) 01:07, 3 August 2013 (UTC)
• Australian Broadcasting Commission appears to be a Corporation.
  • Y Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 22:19, 1 August 2013 (UTC)

I'd feel really uncomfortable promoting this to GA as it has just over 300 words. I would think even DYK would kick this to the kerb. So I'll put it on hold hoping for a reasonable expansion of the article, plus the above issues, for a week. The Rambling Man (talk) 18:24, 31 July 2013 (UTC)

• All issues addressed. The article did make it through DYK, where the requirement is for 1,500 characters of prose. It is more than twice that size. It now has over 600 words of prose. But I strongly believe, having written some very long articles indeed, that an article is as long as it needs to be. Hawkeye7 (talk) 02:15, 3 August 2013 (UTC)

• "FGM-A" should use an en-dash, check others.
• "3PM – 3PA" just en-dash, not spaced en-dash.
• Date/Time -> Just Date.
• FTM-FTA you have a 0 for China, what does that mean.
• Similar FTM-A for Gliders v Japan, you have just "2", what does that mean?
• Keep decimal places the same, so instead of 2 PTS, it should be 2.0 PTS for consistency with other entries in the same table.
• You have "selected international games", and "selected international series", what's the criteria for the selection, what's been left out and why?The Rambling Man (talk) 09:16, 5 August 2013 (UTC)
  • YIt was just a matter of running the bot over the Sporting Pulse. I've decided to remove those tables, leaving only the WNWBL seasons. This makes it consistent with the other articles. Hawkeye7 (talk) 11:56, 5 August 2013 (UTC)
    • Just need to sort the table in chronological order (per WP:SALORDER). The Rambling Man (talk) 11:59, 5 August 2013 (UTC)
      • Y Done. I'll update the bot at a later date. Hawkeye7 (talk) 12:48, 5 August 2013 (UTC)
        • Ok, I made a couple of other fixes, just can you add a publisher to ref 12? And double check the others.... The Rambling Man (talk) 14:34, 5 August 2013 (UTC)

• • • • • • Y All points addressed. Hawkeye7 (talk) 09:14, 14 August 2013 (UTC)