Talk:Cloud9 League of Legends/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Tayi Arajakate (talk · contribs) 05:14, 5 July 2021 (UTC)

• Hello Pbrks, I'll be taking up the review for this article and will be presenting it in some time. I hope my feedback will be helpful to you. Tayi Arajakate _Talk 05:14, 5 July 2021 (UTC)

  Pbrks, I have completed the review and the article almost meets the good article criteria. There are some minor issues with it which needs to be resolved before I can promote it. Good work in general, by the way. Tayi Arajakate _Talk 13:40, 6 July 2021 (UTC)

  Pbrks, I am going to promote this since the issues are resolved now. Regarding the chart, I meant incorporating the "Mid-Season Showdown" into it as it is being referred to as their fourth title in the article, the later Championship could just show the combined records of that year. But that's really up to you. Tayi Arajakate _Talk 05:49, 7 July 2021 (UTC)

Comments

• The line, "[T]he League of Legends division was the first division in Cloud9's history" present in the lead is absent in the body of the article. Corresponding text should be added at the end of the second paragraph of History and will need a citation.
  • This follows from the final sentence under "History": The team then changed hands again, as after only 12 days after their qualification, former Team SoloMid manager Jack Etienne bought out the contracts of the players for less than $20,000, officially creating the Cloud9 organization. I have rephrased it to more accurately reflect this.
• The team Cloud9 Academy is also not mentioned in the body.
  • Although there are passing mentions of their academy team in the body, it never explicitly states this -- removed.
• The subheading "[T]hird LCS title and first Worlds absence" needs a bit of rephrasing.
  • Changed to Third LCS title and first World Championship absence. I cannot think of a more succinct way of phrasing this. It was certainly two very important events in the division's history, so I believe they should both be included somehow.
• The season-by-season records needs to be updated for 2021. The format change can be incorporated into the chart.
  • Updated. What do you mean by incorporating the format change? The splits were no longer mutually exclusive, which is depicted by the year not being split into two rows.
• History doesn't include their performance in the 2021 Mid-Season Invitational.
  • Added.

Assessment

1. Comprehension: The comprehension is good.
Pass

Criteria	Notes	Result
(a) (prose)	The prose is clear and concise.	Pass
(b) (MoS)	The article follows the manual of style.	Pass

2. Verifiability: Minor issue exists. (Resolved)
Pass

Criteria	Notes	Result
(a) (references)	The article has a list of references and all lines in the body have in-line citations.	Pass
(b) (citations to reliable sources)	Sources used appear to be reliable.	Pass
(c) (original research)	Minor issues exist with respect to the lead. (Resolved)	Pass
(d) (copyvio and plagiarism)	No copyright violations found.	Pass

3. Comprehensiveness: Minor issue exists. (Resolved)
Pass

Criteria	Notes	Result
(a) (major aspects)	The article needs a recent update. (Resolved)	Pass
(b) (focused)	The article is focused and does not deviate from the subject.	Pass

4. Neutrality: The article is neutal.
Pass

Notes	Result
The article is complaint with the policy on neutral point of view.	Pass

5. Stability: The article is stable.
Pass

Notes	Result
No recent content disputes, edit warring or major changes.	Pass

6. Illustration: The article is well illustrated.
Pass

Criteria	Notes	Result
(a) (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales)	Images are tagged with their appropriate copyright statuses.	Pass
(b) (appropriate use with suitable captions)	Use and captions are appropiate.	Pass