Talk:Cobra Crack/GA1

Latest comment: 5 months ago by Arconning in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Nominator: Aszx5000 (talk · contribs) 21:24, 25 May 2024 (UTC)Reply

Reviewer: Arconning (talk · contribs) 17:33, 21 June 2024 (UTC)Reply

I will be reviewing this, comments will probably be finished in the next 72 hours! Arconning (talk) 17:33, 21 June 2024 (UTC)Reply

@Aszx5000 Here are my comments for now. Hope they can be addressed! Arconning (talk) 14:04, 22 June 2024 (UTC)Reply
Thanks so much for that @User:Arconning, I have made them all with just one question on paraphrasing the quote from Trotter. Much appreciated. Aszx5000 (talk) 15:25, 22 June 2024 (UTC)Reply

Prose and MoS

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Lead and infobox

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  • Remove sourcing for "Grade", "First ascent", and "First free ascent", as they are all mentioned in the body.
  Done
  • Please mention the location of the climb in the body and source it there instead rather than the infobox.
  Done
  • After repulsing many leading climbers – most notably by Swiss climber Didier Berthod in 2005 – Canadian climber Sonnie Trotter made the first free ascent in 2006. , replace repulsing with something more formal, then replace the endashes with commas.
  Done
  • 5.14b (8c) , add comma at the end.
  Done

History

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  • Wikipedia:Proseline. Probably integrate the years within the paragraph rather than at the starting point.
  Done, I had to re-word the first paragraph's two lead sentences to make it flow
  • free the route, I'm guessing this refers to free climbing? Hyperlink if so. Also reword to "free climb the route".
  Done, and hyperlinked

Route

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  • The route has an abrasive surface, add comma at the end.
  Done
  • circa 30 metres, circa 45 degrees, use a c. template.
  Done
  • extremely difficult (and painful), remove parenthesis.
  Done
  • The technical crux, is crux a climbing term? If so, hyperlink as well.
  Done
  • In 2006, Trotter said: "The redpoint crux comes over the lip on a slippery side pull; the feet are next to nothing, and it takes momentum and a huge throw to latch the final edge, at which point you're about 15 to 20 feet about your last piece of gear—it's really exciting"., I think you should paraphrase the quote.
  Not done, Trotter is a major figure in climbing, so I though it was good to quote his reaction, i.e. direct "from the horse's mouth" so to speak? If you feel strongly however I can paraphrase? thanks
That's fair.

Legacy

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  • beautiful as ever"., put period within the quotes as it's stated as such in the source.
  Done

Ascents

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  • Would like to know why there are two 1sts mentioned.
  Done, clarified that the first one was as a aid climbing route, but the rest are free climbing

Filmography

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  Done
  • Add endash at the end to break up notes. First Ascent: The Movie (2005), Peter Mortimer. Sender Films. ASIN B000IWPP4G. – Documentary with Didier Berthold.
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Images

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  • Images have proper licenses, relevant.
  • Probably change the first image's caption to "Crack seen from the ground".
  Done

Refs

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  • Manual check, everything seems okay.
  • Earwig picks up quotes, pass.

Spotchecks

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  • Random references check, 5, 14, 18, 24, all seem good.

Misc

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  • No ongoing edit war, article is focused and broad on the topic being discussed.
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Criteria: 1a. prose ( ) 1b. MoS ( ) 2a. ref layout ( ) 2b. cites WP:RS ( ) 2c. no WP:OR ( ) 2d. no WP:CV ( )
3a. broadness ( ) 3b. focus ( ) 4. neutral ( ) 5. stable ( ) 6a. free or tagged images ( ) 6b. pics relevant ( )
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