Talk:Cold (Kanye West song)/GA1

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Reviewer: Status (talk · contribs) 07:44, 7 July 2012 (UTC)

• 1 disambiguation link

Done.

Lead

• not to be featured onto any --> not to be featured on any
• onto iTunes on April 4, 2012 --> on the iTunes Store on April 4, 2012
• The production was handled by Hit-Boy. --> How about stating who wrote the song? That sentence is a bit lonely. Something like: The song was written by West, Chauncey Hollis, James Todd Smith and Marlon Williams, while the production was handled by Hit-Boy.
• The song received positive reviews from music critics who praised West's lyrical performance and the boldness of his subject matter. --> The song received positive reviews from music critics, who praised West's lyrical performance and the boldness of his subject matter.
• US Billboard Hot R&B/Hip-Hop Songs charts --> US Billboard Hot R&B/Hip-Hop Songs chart

All done.

• The track received single artwork designed by George Condo. --> Awkward sentence. The single's artwork was designed by George Condo. Did he also do the Twisted Fantasy artwork? It looks like he did. Should say that also.

Done. Added a line about that.

• The song drew controversy from Humphries, the brand Theraflu, and PETA who criticized the content of West's lyrics. --> Why exactly was PETA upset about it?

Done.

Background

• This seems more appropriate to be titled "production and release".
• In an interview Khaled explained, "I was in the studio --> In an interview Khaled explained: "I was in the studio. You should also put who Ye is in brackets, like 'Ye [name]
• West then released the song as a single onto iTunes --> He didn't personally release the song on iTunes. And it's the iTunes Store, but iTunes itself.
• Should note it impacted US radio on that date.

All done.

Composition

• Prose is good. I'm saying this here so I don't have to start a whole new infobox section here, but genres are usually sourced in the composition section. Where is the source for the genre that is in the infobox?

Removed unsourced genre claim in infobox

• Additionally, [1] this is an issue. If you don't know how to fix it, I would be happy to do it for you. The same thing happened to me recently, but I figured out how to do it.

Thank you! But I removed the sample since it wasn't overly important.

Critical reception

• No issues.

Controversy

• Pink (singer) --> Pink

Done.

Live performances

• No issues.

Chart performance

• Consistency between Billboard and (Billboard)

Done.

As far as I am aware, all corrections have been done. Bruce Campbell (talk) 06:26, 12 July 2012 (UTC)

• Just one remaining issue. I was saying for [name], insert the name of the person. I know 'Ye is a nickname for someone, I just don't know who. Put who it is in the [name]. Statυs (talk) 19:46, 12 July 2012 (UTC)

Done. Bruce Campbell (talk) 20

37, 12 July 2012 (UTC)