Talk:Colin Grainger/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 21:41, 5 April 2020 (UTC)

Comments very nice work.

• Leeds United is overlinked in the lead.

Done.--EchetusXe 05:50, 7 April 2020 (UTC)

• "the FA Cup the following January" could link the actual edition of the FA Cup.

Done.--EchetusXe 05:50, 7 April 2020 (UTC)

• Link player-manager.

Done.--EchetusXe 05:50, 7 April 2020 (UTC)

• "with The Beatles in" -> "with the Beatles in", same with Hilltoppers.

Done.--EchetusXe 05:50, 7 April 2020 (UTC)

• Link "scouting".

Done.--EchetusXe 05:50, 7 April 2020 (UTC)

• "He married Doreen..." Grainger married...

Done.--EchetusXe 05:50, 7 April 2020 (UTC)

• Wrexham overlinked.

Done.--EchetusXe 05:50, 7 April 2020 (UTC)

• "1949–50 season " I would put season/campaign etc into the pipe here because that's actually what's being linked.

Done.--EchetusXe 05:50, 7 April 2020 (UTC)

• "His national service ..." was capitalised last time?

Done.--EchetusXe 05:50, 7 April 2020 (UTC)

• Sheff Utd, Football League, Tottenham and Barnsley all overlinked.

Done.--EchetusXe 05:50, 7 April 2020 (UTC)

• "of £20-a-week " etc, why hyphenate?

Seems a normal thing?.--EchetusXe 05:50, 7 April 2020 (UTC)

• " The "Blades" went" this may be unclear to a non-expert reader.

I've moved it to a place where it fits better.--EchetusXe 05:50, 7 April 2020 (UTC)

• "Grainger's arrival at Roker Park i..." Sunderland's Roker Park.

Done.--EchetusXe 05:50, 7 April 2020 (UTC)

• "The club were freely spending money, spending ..." I would say "was" and try to avoid repeat of "spending".

Done.--EchetusXe 05:50, 7 April 2020 (UTC)

• Portsmouth is overlinked.

Done.--EchetusXe 05:50, 7 April 2020 (UTC)

• Leeds United and maximum wage is overlinked.

Done.--EchetusXe 05:50, 7 April 2020 (UTC)

• Barnsley is overlinked.

Done.--EchetusXe 05:50, 7 April 2020 (UTC)

• " three of the club's final 15" 3/15 or three/fifteen.

Done.--EchetusXe 05:50, 7 April 2020 (UTC)

• Brighton is overlinked.

Done.--EchetusXe 05:50, 7 April 2020 (UTC)

• Billy Bingham is too.

Done.--EchetusXe 05:50, 7 April 2020 (UTC)

• England, Matthews, Munich and Wembley also.

Done.--EchetusXe 05:50, 7 April 2020 (UTC)

• Online refs need publication/accessdates (see ref 100 for instance).

Done.--EchetusXe 05:50, 7 April 2020 (UTC)

• Spaced hyphen in ref titles should be en-dash.

Done.--EchetusXe 05:50, 7 April 2020 (UTC)

• "p19" -> "p. 19"

Done.--EchetusXe 05:50, 7 April 2020 (UTC)

• Bury F.C. non-playing staff is a category but not mentioned in the article.

Yes it is?--EchetusXe 05:50, 7 April 2020 (UTC)

Weird, I need to have a word with my Cmd+F! Cheers. The Rambling Man (Stay indoors, stay safe!!!!) 09:31, 7 April 2020 (UTC)

That's it. This is close to featured quality, so the above in general are just suggestions. I'll put it on hold briefly while we discuss. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 12:43, 6 April 2020 (UTC)

Okay thanks! I've checked them over.--EchetusXe 05:50, 7 April 2020 (UTC)

This is an excellent article. I would commend it to FAC. So promoting. The Rambling Man (Stay indoors, stay safe!!!!) 09:31, 7 April 2020 (UTC)