Talk:Colours (Ayumi Hamasaki album)/GA1

GA Review

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I am going to give this article a Review for possible GA status. Reviewer: Shearonink (talk · contribs) 05:01, 18 January 2017 (UTC)

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

1. Is it well written?

   A. The prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct:

   For the most part this is true but please refer to Grammar action below. Shearonink (talk) 00:32, 26 January 2017 (UTC)

   The issues have all been dealt with. Shearonink (talk) 02:55, 12 February 2017 (UTC)

   B. It complies with the manual of style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation:

2. Is it verifiable with no original research?

   A. It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline:

   B. All in-line citations are from reliable sources, including those for direct quotations, statistics, published opinion, counter-intuitive or controversial statements that are challenged or likely to be challenged, and contentious material relating to living persons—science-based articles should follow the scientific citation guidelines:

   Dead links: Ref #18 (https://itunes.apple.com/jp/album/colours/id886573248), http://headlines.yahoo.co.jp/hl?a=20140710-00010004-musicv-ent, Ref#47 (http://www.msn.com/en-ph/news/entertainment-celebrity/ayumi-hamasaki-brings-the-house-down-at-a-nation-singapore/ss-BB9S5Hj#image=1)

   Changed URLs (so they need to be updated): Ref #22 http://www.jpopasia.com/news/ayumi-hamasaki-experiences-worst-album-sales-of-career-with-colours-release::16724.html should be updated to http://www.jpopasia.com/feed/15515/ayumi-hamasaki-experiences-worst-album-sales-of-career-with-colours-release/

   Ref #13 needs to be fixed - http://asiapacificarts.usc.edu/w_apa/showarticle.aspx?articleID=19131&AspxAutoDetectCookieSupport=1 should be updated to http://asiapacificarts.usc.edu/(X(1)A(iUSeVT-o0gEkAAAAYTUwOTkyODgtYmRiMS00MTliLWFhNzUtNDM2ODBkNDA0MzMyajGKzVGXlO9KRP2z3ox3fkgw7DM1))/w_apa/showarticle.aspx?articleID=19131&AspxAutoDetectCookieSupport=1

   All fixed. Shearonink (talk) 02:55, 12 February 2017 (UTC)

   C. It contains no original research:

   D. It contains no copyright violations nor plagiarism:

   Ran the copyvio tool - everything looks fine. Shearonink (talk) 15:34, 22 January 2017 (UTC)

3. Is it broad in its coverage?

   A. It addresses the main aspects of the topic:

   B. It stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style):

4. Is it neutral?

   It represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each:

5. Is it stable?

   It does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute:

6. Is it illustrated, if possible, by images?

   A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:

   B. Images are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:

7. Overall:

   Pass or Fail:

   Congrats to User:MarioSoulTruthFan for stepping in and adjusting/correcting this article's various issues. Thanks to them this article is now a WP:GA.Shearonink (talk) 02:55, 12 February 2017 (UTC)

Comment: This article is massive and will take me a while to work through - please be patient. Thanks, Shearonink (talk) 17:11, 18 January 2017 (UTC)

References

This review is on hold until the referencing issues are taken care of. Shearonink (talk) 15:34, 22 January 2017 (UTC)

Fixed per User:MarioSoulTruthFan. Shearonink (talk) 02:55, 12 February 2017 (UTC)

Grammar

• Hamasaki begun recording the album in 2013 begun->began
• Majority of the albums content is written by Yamasaki ....should be...-> The majority of the album's content was written
• Elsewhere, he album reached number 75 and 16 ...should be...-> Elsewhere, the album
  
• The tours were generally success, and spawned two live video releases. Further on wards, Hamasaki performed at the 2014 A-Nation concert tour in Singapore, one of her first performances in that region for years ...should be...-> The tours were generally a success, and spawned two live video releases. Yamasaki was then part of the 2014 A-Nation concert tour
• and "Now & 4Eva" at Prime Sound Studio Form's, Avex Studio's, and Avex Studio Azabu's ...should be...-> and "Now & 4Eva" at Prime Sound Studio Form, Avex Studio, and Avex Studio Azabu
• Majority of the albums content is written by Hamasaki in English and Japanese language. ...should be...-> The majority of the album's content is written by Hamasaki in English and Japanese.
• According to the lyric booklets published through physical formats of the album, ...should b...-> According to the lyric booklets published with [or -> booklets that came with] the physical formats of the album,
• The track "Lelio" was recorded in English language with additional Japanese lyrics throughout the verses. ...should be...-> The track "Lelio" was recorded in English with additional Japanese lyrics throughout the verses.
• and a Boutique aroma candle by company Milena's. Notes-> What is this trying to say?... a Malena's brand aroma candle scented with "Boutique"? a small aroma candle from the Milena's brand? Please adjust.
• did not review the album exenstively ...should be...-> did not review the album extensively
• Commercially, it was not as successful as her predecessor records in Japan. ...should be...-> Commercially, it was not as successful as her previous records in Japan.
• Elsewhere, he album reached number 75 and 16 ...should be...-> Elsewhere, the album reached number 75 and 16
• Both tracks had been promoted separated not long after ...should be...-> Both tracks had been promoted separately not long after
• after her MTV Asia Awards performance 12 years ago ...should be...-> after her MTV Asia Awards performance 12 years previously

Any further work on this Review is on hold until the referencing issues are fixed. Shearonink (talk) 02:04, 25 January 2017 (UTC)

Any further work on this Review is on hold until the referencing and grammar problems are fixed. Shearonink (talk) 14:51, 3 February 2017 (UTC)

@Shearonink: All  Done. I took the liberty of helping the user since he seems to be MIA. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 17:02, 11 February 2017 (UTC)

They might have been MIA but the nominator did edit WP on Feb 8th and also edited elsewhere on WP today, see here. Shearonink (talk) 02:27, 12 February 2017 (UTC)

@MarioSoulTruthFan: Thanks. Honestly, since I hadn't heard back at all from the nominator after starting work on this Review back in January I was thinking of having to fail it within the next few days. If you're looking for something else to do, the referencing problems above (2B criteria) need to be corrected/adjusted.... Thanks again, Shearonink (talk) 18:31, 11 February 2017 (UTC)

@Shearonink: I missed that. Now it is concluded. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 18:51, 11 February 2017 (UTC)

All fixed. Shearonink (talk) 02:55, 12 February 2017 (UTC)

Proofreading-readthroughs

I am going to so a some more deep reads of the article over the next few days to see if there are any GA criteria items I missed. Barring any new issues, I should be able to finish up my Review within the next few days. Shearonink (talk) 19:03, 11 February 2017 (UTC)

Ok, ping me once you done it. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 00:53, 12 February 2017 (UTC)

@MarioSoulTruthFan: No issues found - read the article through at least twice, ran both the copyvio tool & the Checklinks tool again. Congrats it's a GA. Shearonink (talk) 02:55, 12 February 2017 (UTC)