Talk:Columbus nightclub shooting/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Kavyansh.Singh (talk · contribs) 05:17, 1 January 2022 (UTC)
Nominator: GhostRiver (talk · contribs) at 18:49, 21 October 2021 (UTC)

Will take a look soon! – Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 05:17, 1 January 2022 (UTC)

GA criteria

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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Comments

Prose

• to prevent another such incident from occurring. → "to prevent another such incidents from occurring."
  •  Done — GhostRiver 16:34, 2 January 2022 (UTC)
• with post traumatic stress disorder → "with post-traumatic stress disorder" (added hyphen)
  •  Done — GhostRiver 16:34, 2 January 2022 (UTC)
• responding to a 911 call — Can link it to 9-1-1
  •  Done and made uniform throughout the body — GhostRiver 16:34, 2 January 2022 (UTC)
• 250 fans had purchased tickets — avoid start a sentence by a number.
  •  Fixed — GhostRiver 16:34, 2 January 2022 (UTC)
• a 6 feet (1.8 m), 6 feet 3 inches (1.91 m) and weighting 266 pounds (121 kg) — feet is spelled but meter is in abbreviation. Same with pounds, kg.
  •  Fixed — GhostRiver 16:34, 2 January 2022 (UTC)
• 23-year-old fan Nathan Bray leapt — avoid start a sentence by a number.
  •  Fixed — GhostRiver 16:34, 2 January 2022 (UTC)
• where Abbott was pronounced dead at the age of 38. — I'd remove "at the age of 38". Maybe make it another sentence
  •  Done — GhostRiver 16:34, 2 January 2022 (UTC)
• and he told his employer, Rich Cencula, that he was schizophrenic. → "and informed his employer, Rich Cencula, of his condition." ('schizophrenic' is repeated here)
  •  Done — GhostRiver 16:34, 2 January 2022 (UTC)
• When Christina Grimmie was fatally shot by an obsessed fan during a meet ... — which year?
  •  Added — GhostRiver 16:34, 2 January 2022 (UTC)
• The city of Columbus, Ohio template at the end of the article apparently doesn't has this incident linked. Either the article needs to be in the template, or the template doesn't need to be in the article.
  •  Removed — GhostRiver 16:34, 2 January 2022 (UTC)

That is it! A very-well written article.

Images

• Images need ALT text.
  •  Added — GhostRiver 16:34, 2 January 2022 (UTC)

Sources

• Minor inconsistency in linking. News agency/website is sometimes wiki-linked, sometimes not.
  •  Fixed Everything is now linked except for the two publications without Wikipedia articles (My Plainview and Marysville Journal-Tribune)
• Few The New York Times sources need url-access-level=subscription
  •  Added to the one NYT source I found — GhostRiver 16:34, 2 January 2022 (UTC)
• "New York, NY" should really be "New York City, NY"?
  •  Done — GhostRiver 16:34, 2 January 2022 (UTC)
• Suggesting to add "|ref=none" in the further reading work.
  •  Done — GhostRiver 16:34, 2 January 2022 (UTC)

That is it. I am struggling to nitpick. Excellent work! Putting on hold. – Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 18:53, 1 January 2022 (UTC)

Kavyansh.Singh Everything should be addressed now, thank you for such a prompt review! — GhostRiver 16:34, 2 January 2022 (UTC)

Nice work! Promoting! – Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 19:22, 2 January 2022 (UTC)

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