Talk:Comoros at the 2012 Summer Olympics/GA1
Latest comment: 7 years ago by Yellow Dingo in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: Yellow Dingo (talk · contribs) 05:42, 19 October 2016 (UTC)
Taking, I'll will do the full review soon. — Yellow Dingo (talk) 05:42, 19 October 2016 (UTC)
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edit- Per WP:TITLEABSENTBOLD, un-bold "Comoros" and "2012 Summer Olympics"
- Done
- "beyond the second round of their respective events." - why not beyond the first? Neither did that either.
- Corrected MWright96 (talk) 06:11, 20 October 2016 (UTC)
- The second paragraph in the "background" section is confusing, You say "The two athletes that were selected to compete in the London games" but then you talk about a third athlete.
- Corrected MWright96 (talk) 06:11, 20 October 2016 (UTC)
- "53:49" → "53.49"
- Done MWright96 (talk) 06:11, 20 October 2016 (UTC)
- "(48,33 seconds)" → "(48.33 seconds)
- "46 (and last)" → "46th (and last)"
- "drawn into the" → "drawn in the"
- "11:81 seconds" → "11.81 seconds"
- Your prose about Ahamada is wrong. She took part in the preliminary round (a round that only the weaker athletes have to race in). She won her preliminary round heat and qualified for the heat round proper. You say "quarter-finals" , they aren't known as that. They are known as the "heats" as distinct from the "preliminary round". Please correct the section.
- Corrected MWright96 (talk) 06:11, 20 October 2016 (UTC)
- "freestyle which" → "freestyle, which"
- Corrected MWright96 (talk) 06:11, 20 October 2016 (UTC)
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editA nice article with a few issues so putting on hold. I have asked for any grammatical changes for Ahamada's section due to the misinformation. — Yellow Dingo (talk) 22:34, 19 October 2016 (UTC)
- Thanks for the review Yellow Dingo. I've implemented your suggested changes. MWright96 (talk) 06:11, 20 October 2016 (UTC)
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edit@MWright96: Just a couple more minor errors:
- "day of the" → "day as the"
- "Ahamada finished seven" → "Ahamada finished seventh"
- "and was unable to progress in the semi-finals" → "did not progress to the semi-finals"
- Done
- Remove N/A and bye from key
- Done
— Yellow Dingo (talk) 08:10, 20 October 2016 (UTC)
- @Yellow Dingo: All further issues have been rectified. MWright96 (talk) 08:19, 20 October 2016 (UTC)
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editOk, nice work. Passing GAN. Congratulations — Yellow Dingo (talk) 08:21, 20 October 2016 (UTC)