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  This article is or was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): RenCorpus. Peer reviewers: Bray shawn 2016.

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Hello, first, English is not my mother tongue, so, when I don't express myself well, forgive me. I think the article is of the topic. It is not about consumer revolution (which refers to a radical change in consumer behaviour) but about consumption revolution, which refers to a radical change in consumed goods, which on it's turn was closely linked to the Industrial Revolution, which we also did not call Entrepreneur Revolution, because the entrepreneurs just kept on behaving like they had always done, just that the technical possibilities to produce goods changed dramatically during that period, and they made use of it. The right name of this article should be Consumption Revolution, and everywhere there is written consumer revolution, should be replaced by consumption revolution. As far as I understood, do the references also refer to change in consumption and not to change in consumer behaviour.Helius.klein (talk) 14:58, 15 August 2011 (UTC)Reply

Renee's sources (so far)

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I am going to add to this page hopefully using the following sources:

°Pennell, Sarah. "Consumption and Consumerism in Early Modern England," The Historical Journal Vol. 42, No. 2 (June 1999), 549-564.

°Berg, Maxine. "In Pursuit of Luxury: Global History and British Consumer Goods in the Eighteenth Century," Past & Present No. 182 (Feb., 2004), 85-142.

°Monod, Paul Kleber. "Are You Getting Enough Culture? Moving from Social to Cultural History in Eighteenth‐Century Britain," History Compass Vol. 6, No. 1 (Jan., 2008), 91-108.

°David M. Turner & Alun Withey. "Technologies of the Body: Polite Consumption and the Correction of Deformity in Eighteenth-Century England," History Vol. 99, No. 338 (Dec., 2014), 775-796.

°Dyer, Serena. "Shopping and the Senses: Retail, Browsing and Consumption in 18th-Century England," History Compass Vol. 12, No. 9 (Sep., 2014), 694-703.

Renee's Proposed Changes Outline

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°I plan on discussing the imitation of luxury goods by the middle class. The imitation of luxury goods called "semi-luxury" goods. This paragraph may or may not include the effect of the semi-luxury goods on the luxury goods market.

°Expanding the paragraph discussing social mobility. Emphasizing the use of status symbols. Perhaps focusing on how the differing occupations or backgrounds of the consumers affected how strongly they wished to prove themselves.

°I may create a different section the goes into how the Consumer Revolution affected the different social classes. This will depend on whether or not I find enough sources for each class.


RenCorpus (talk) 07:49, 23 February 2016 (UTC)Reply

Peer Review of Renee Corpus section

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I believe that you overall captured the intent of the counterfeit culture that arose from this trading back and forth between east and west. My three critiques or changes I made revolve around:

1: a simple grammatical change in a sentence (scene to seen) "create the original products were seen as a show of enlightened and advanced thinking" instead of the original scene

2: This passage was confusing to me: "To avoid entirely copying Asian goods, English inventors imitated goods from other countries that also traded with Asia such as France, Holland, Switzerland, and Spain. The goal was not to mimic the exact product, but instead use the techniques that proved successful in other European imitations to create a superior product." I think it is the first part of the first sentence that is the most confusing because I do not understand the significance of the English trying to avoid copying Asian goods. Maybe wording this passage differently or adding more will make this more clear.

3: You begin the section with European learning about classical cultures as well as eastern culture, however you only discuss the Eastern goods (Chinese porcelain) and not classical influences. I think that maybe you should expand on this or take it out because it is already mentioned in the article.

I think that you did very well putting a large chunk of information into this article which does not have much on it to begin with! Bray shawn 2016 (talk) 02:19, 10 April 2016 (UTC)Reply

≈≈ Professor's comments. This is good feedback. Renee, please edit your page with Shawn's comments in mind. ≈≈ — Preceding unsigned comment added by Teacheurohist (talkcontribs) 19:56, 12 April 2016 (UTC)Reply