Talk:Convair F2Y Sea Dart/GA1
Latest comment: 7 years ago by Krishna Chaitanya Velaga in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk · contribs) 11:05, 14 April 2017 (UTC)
Will get to this shortly. Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk • mail) 11:05, 14 April 2017 (UTC)
- Lead and infobox;
- was a unique American seaplane fighter aircraft; What is the purpose of "unique"?
- The second para needs to be broken to sentences. Except the last sentence the entire para is presented as a single sentence using commas which in the end gives rise to difficulty in getting the flow and the meaning. Break this.
- Done
- It was created "in 1950s"
as a result of"to overcome" the problems with supersonic planes taking off and landing on aircraft carriersthat was experienced in the 1950s - Done
- Section 1;
- Link U.S. Navy on the first mention; not on the second
- Done
- Section 2;
- "Required" power was
to be"put up" by a pair of after-burning Westinghouse XJ46-WE-02 turbojets - Done
- "Required" power was
- Section 3;
- Who is E. D. "Sam" Shannon? Mention his position, if possible
- He doesn't have a military rank, as he just worked for Convair, as a test pilot. Is that worth mentioning? Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 12:11, 27 April 2017 (UTC)
- but they could not cure the sluggish performance -> but they were unable to resolve the sluggish performance
- Done
- a demonstration for Navy officials -> a demonstration to the naval officials
- Done
- disintegrated in midair; delink the external link. External links are not allowed in the body of the article per WP:EL
- Done
- Link Second World War
- Done
- breakup of the airframe -> airframe breakage
- Done
- Link airframe
- Done
- He is buried -> He was buried
- Done
- Who is E. D. "Sam" Shannon? Mention his position, if possible
- 70.4% confidence, violation likely. Please explain this.
- Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk • mail) 03:55, 27 April 2017 (UTC)
- Regarding copyvio (barging in as I was passing along) - it is most likely the youtube page created on Nov 16, 2007 copied from the wiki page that existed back then - [1] - looks like an exact copy of the 2007 version, but the wiki version pre-dates the youtube entry.Icewhiz (talk) 08:34, 27 April 2017 (UTC)
- @Krishna Chaitanya Velaga: I believe Icewhiz is correct here, but I shall investigate the issue. I believe that all other problems have been fixed. Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 12:11, 27 April 2017 (UTC)
- It is reasonably well written.
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
- a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- Overall:
- Pass/Fail:
- Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk • mail) 06:05, 29 April 2017 (UTC)
- Pass/Fail: