Talk:Cool (Gwen Stefani song)/GA1

Latest comment: 14 years ago by Tbhotch in topic GA Review

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Reviewer: Adabow (talk · contribs) 10:02, 11 November 2010 (UTC)Reply

Nice to see someone getting the FT back!

Writing and composition

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Pretty comprehensive here, just a couple of comments:

  • As you mention No Doubt it may be worth including the fact that Stefani was part of the band
  • Does the caption of the sound file need to be so long? I don't think you need to write the lyrics here, as people can listen to it themselves, and it is probably not fair use to include them along with the audio sample.
  • Oh, and could the recording details be mentioned here, so that they do not need sourcing in the infobox? Adabow (talk · contribs) 22:50, 11 November 2010 (UTC)Reply

Critical reception

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This is not overlink New Wave? Already linked in the section above. TbhotchTalk C. 23:08, 11 November 2010 (UTC)Reply

Chart performance

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  • "...and within next eight weeks..." → ...and within the next eight weeks...
  • "It stayed on the chart eighteen weeks..." → It stayed on the chart for eighteen weeks...
  • "On other Billboard charts, the single topped the Hot Dance Club Play, as well as reached the numbers four and nine on the Adult Top 40 and Pop 100, respectively" → rewrite
  • "...dropping the chart on..." → ...dropping off/from the chart on...
  • '"Cool" became the second highest debut of the week ending September 5, 2005, at eleven' → number eleven
  • "...staying there only one week" → ..staying there for only one week
  • "...the single debuted at number eighteen soaring to number sixteen the following week..." → comma after 'eighteen'
  • "Moreover, in Austria..." I don't think that 'moreover' is a good choice of word here
All done. TbhotchTalk C. 23:08, 11 November 2010 (UTC)Reply
You missed one :) Adabow (talk · contribs) 23:26, 11 November 2010 (UTC)Reply
Oops.   Done TbhotchTalk C. 23:31, 11 November 2010 (UTC)Reply
Still a bit iffy. How about "On other Billboard charts, the single topped the Hot Dance Club Play, reached number four on the Adult Top 40 and number nine on the Pop 100."?
Again done :) TbhotchTalk C. 23:44, 11 November 2010 (UTC)Reply
Much better Adabow (talk · contribs) 23:51, 11 November 2010 (UTC)Reply

Music video and promotion

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  • Place ref 32 at end of sentence, it looks odd before a dash.
Done
  • Maybe place inverted commas around 'cool' when you are describing Stefani's feelings in the video?
It was suggested at PR to not to do it, because it may confuse readers with the song and the word cool. TbhotchTalk C. 23:08, 11 November 2010 (UTC)Reply

Track listings

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  • {{Col-2}} the different listings
Done TbhotchTalk C. 23:08, 11 November 2010 (UTC)Reply

Personnel

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  • Again, {{Col-2}} can be used here. I'm not sure about bulleting the source, I think indenting would be better.
Done TbhotchTalk C. 23:08, 11 November 2010 (UTC)Reply
  • Alphabetical order would be preferable
Orderer by their last name (or maybe you intended by their name?) excepting for Gwen who I think she is the important person here. TbhotchTalk C. 23:08, 11 November 2010 (UTC)Reply

References

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As online sources not, but since the workers go italics, they should go in that way. Personally I won't edit war with bots and automated tools which do their job. TbhotchTalk C. 23:08, 11 November 2010 (UTC)Reply
Then place it in the publisher field Adabow (talk · contribs) 23:26, 11 November 2010 (UTC)Reply
Done. TbhotchTalk C. 23:44, 11 November 2010 (UTC)Reply
  • Add Alpha Media Group as publisher for Blender ref
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  • The Australian Recording Industry Association does not publish the Hung Medien pages
I think is done. TbhotchTalk C. 23:53, 11 November 2010 (UTC)Reply
  • Same for New Zealand. If you want to link to individual charts you can use links like [1], otherwise use the Hung Medien page for the song (as you do in Australia)
As above. TbhotchTalk C. 23:53, 11 November 2010 (UTC)Reply
  • Hung Medien is a secondary source. Thus, the chart publishers do not need crediting here
Removed. TbhotchTalk C. 23:44, 11 November 2010 (UTC)Reply
There are still a couple of unneeded italics, but I won't worry about them as the rest of the article is of quite a high quality. Adabow (talk · contribs) 23:57, 11 November 2010 (UTC)Reply

Other

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  • Images, NPOV, broadness all OK
  • Has the edit war between you and SnapSnap been sorted out?
I think it is resolved. It was about what you commented on the references, about links should or not be italised. TbhotchTalk C. 23:24, 11 November 2010 (UTC)Reply

On hold now... Adabow (talk · contribs) 22:46, 11 November 2010 (UTC)Reply

Passed. Well done. Adabow (talk · contribs) 23:58, 11 November 2010 (UTC)Reply
Thank you and thanks for review it. TbhotchTalk C. 00:02, 12 November 2010 (UTC)Reply

Unfortunatly Harajuku Lovers Tour 2005 must be a GA for re-nominate those articles for a FT.   Doing... TbhotchTalk C. 20:02, 11 November 2010 (UTC)Reply
Ah well, shouldn't take you too long :P Adabow (talk · contribs) 22:46, 11 November 2010 (UTC)Reply
lol, I don't know, songs are easier than tours, but maybe. TbhotchTalk C. 00:02, 12 November 2010 (UTC)Reply