Talk:Copper Fire/GA1
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Nominator: Penitentes (talk · contribs) 16:55, 30 August 2024 (UTC)
Reviewer: Sammi Brie (talk · contribs) 00:54, 1 October 2024 (UTC)
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Looking very good. Some copy tweaks to make first. Ping when done. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 01:09, 1 October 2024 (UTC)
- @Sammi Brie Thank you very much for the thorough review! Made the changes. — Penitentes (talk) 13:20, 1 October 2024 (UTC)
Did you know? If you fancy doing so, I always have plenty of GA nominees to review. Just look for the all-uppercase titles in the Television section. Reviews always appreciated.
Copy changes
edit- Link Angeles National Forest in the lead
- Hyphenate "fifth-largest"
- At 5:00 p.m., the head of the fire crested the hills above Green Valley, and an hour later a second flank of the fire entered the canyon as firefighters fought to protect the structures there, and were partially successful: by the end of the day, the fire had burned more than 15,600 acres (6,300 ha) and had added five homes to its toll. Sentence is quite long. Try At 5:00 p.m., the head of the fire crested the hills above Green Valley, and an hour later a second flank of the fire entered the canyon as firefighters fought to protect the structures there. They were partially successful: by the end of the day, the fire had burned more than 15,600 acres (6,300 ha) and had added five homes to its toll.
- it was "going to be another couple days before we get a handle on this." MOS:LOGICAL sentence fragment, quote inside period.
- CB&I was found to be 65 percent liable, and Merco found to be 35 percent liable. Remove comma WP:CINS
- Done Copy changes made; good spots all. — Penitentes (talk) 13:16, 1 October 2024 (UTC)
Sourcing and spot checks
edit- 1: The Signal article checks out for inaccessible definition of terrain, Green Valley, 5,600 acre number, cresting, and firefighter counts.
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one of the earliest fire seasons in decades
- 10: Near-shutdown of the second line; reduced containment; 2,000 in Green Valley and Warm Springs to evacuate.
- 16: Final county road damage toll; June 7 local emergency.
- 17: Environmental damage assessments.
No other sourcing concerns. Earwig mostly turns up banal phrases and organization names.
Images
editThere are two images, both in the infobox. The map is the user's creation and appropriately licensed. (It's truly impressive, by the way.) The other is PD-NASA. Alt text is provided.