Talk:Cora Agnes Benneson/GA1
Latest comment: 5 months ago by Voorts in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: Sammielh (talk · contribs) 09:57, 2 March 2024 (UTC)
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I'll pick this one up. Comments below! Sammielh (talk) 09:57, 2 March 2024 (UTC)
Lead
edit- "under the then-professor Woodrow Wilson." Not an expert on false titles but I think dropping "the" would be neater in this instance as it's a bit difficult to follow on first reading
- Done.
- "the Massachusetts Governor Frederic T. Greenhalge in 1895" I think Massachusetts can be dropped without confusion
- Done.
- "Social and Economic Science section in 1900" should this be lowercase?
- It's a proper noun, so I've capitalized section as well.
Body
edit- "and
aspresident of the city's board of education for 14 years"- Done.
- "including Amos Bronson Alcott and Ralph Waldo Emerson" I would give a brief explanation of who each is
- I added that they were writers and philosophers.
- "Benneson graduated from the Quincy Seminary" Do we know what level of education this was?
- Equivalent to high school.
- (Optional) I would be inclined to mention (maybe just in a note) that Harvard did not admit female law students until 1950, to make clear that this wasn't just an issue faced by Benneson. It is my understanding that Michigan was one of the only law schools admitting women at the time
- Done.
- Perhaps explain what the moot court was, if information is available
- WL the words moot court.
- "Benneson wrote during her world travels" What did she write? A journal, letters, articles, etc?
- Clarified.
- "Trueblood wrote that "her lectures,"
- Fixed
- Link Radcliffe College at first instance
- Done.
- I assume there's no information about what type of law she practiced?
- Not that I could find. Her obituary from the Illinois State Historical Society notes that it was "large and successful".
- The Massachusetts Bar is linked twice
- Fixed
- I would be inclined to put the information about Almeda Eliza Hitchcock in the body of the article if there is information in the sources
- There's not much said, just that Benneson inspired Hitchock, and I don't think it's a particularly meaningful moment in Benneson's life, whereas it was quite obviously important to Hitchock.
Sources
edit- Might be cleaner to link the Trueblood source to Wikisource at this link
Source checks and further comments to follow. Sammielh (talk) 09:57, 2 March 2024 (UTC)
- @Sammielh: THanks for the thorough review. I've responded to everything above. Best, voorts (talk/contributions) 21:48, 2 March 2024 (UTC)
- @Voorts: Looks great, thanks! More below Sammielh (talk) 19:31, 5 March 2024 (UTC)
- Source checked citation 3, 5, 6, 8, 11, 18, 23, 29
- 3: no issues
- 5: cites the Friends in Council sentence but I can't see the rest
- 6: has no issues but I'd add that Quincy Seminary was college preparatory to the article
- Done.
- 8: this is only on page 275 of Nazzal 2000
- Changed
- 11: no issues
- 18: this is all on page 278
- The quote is, but page 279 contains additional analysis of Benneson's views of other cultures.
- 23: no issues, although I'd mention in the article that she held the position until her death
- Done.
- 29: this doesn't give the date of her death
- The obit in The Quincy Daily Herald does, so I consolidated the two cites in that paragraph.
- What is the "Essay" parameter in the Jordan 2019 citation?
- It's the department parameter. Law journals publish articles, essays, and comments, and this is in the essay section of the journal. See the documentation for {{cite journal}}.
- (Optional) You can link Sisters in Law to this link at the Internet Archive
- Done.
- Do we know that the Quincy Academy photo was published pre 1929?
- I've changed the tag to PD-unpublished. It appears that this photograph was not published prior to being posted on the Historical Society website post-2003.
@Sammielh: I've responded above. voorts (talk/contributions) 22:55, 6 March 2024 (UTC)
- @Sammielh: I realized I forgot to respond to note 5. A ref must have somehow gotten moved while I was editing. Fixed that as well and that should be everything. voorts (talk/contributions) 02:03, 8 March 2024 (UTC)
- @Voorts: Looks good! Thanks for all your hard work on this article, promoting now. Sammielh (talk) 07:27, 8 March 2024 (UTC)
- Thank you for your thorough review. voorts (talk/contributions) 17:08, 8 March 2024 (UTC)
- @Voorts: Looks good! Thanks for all your hard work on this article, promoting now. Sammielh (talk) 07:27, 8 March 2024 (UTC)