Talk:Corfu Declaration/GA1
Latest comment: 3 years ago by Tomobe03 in topic GA Review
GA Review
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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 22:13, 6 September 2021 (UTC)
Comments
- "Kingdom of Serbia Nikola Pašić and the" ->"Kingdom of Serbia, Nikola Pašić, and the"
- Could link "unification".
- "and the president of the Yugoslav Committee Ante Trumbić. " -> "and Ante Trumbić, the president of the Yugoslav Committee. " this way we avoid butting up those blue-links.
- "significantly far apart" far apart -> disparate?
- Link Centralized government?
- "Ante Trumbić led the..." that's a sentence so full stop.
- "The committee, partially funded by the Serbian government, consisted" -> "Partially funded by the Serbian government, it consisted"
- "his conflict was the result of a conflict " ugh, disagreement for one of those conflicts?
- "Participants of the..." that's a fragment, so no full stop.
- "Address of the delegation" similar.
- Could link List of islands in the Adriatic.
- Ref 2 - pp.
- "Pavlowitch, Stevan K. " en-dash in year range.
- "the 1914-1918" en-dash.
That's all I have. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 16:08, 7 September 2021 (UTC)
The Rambling Man, thanks for taking time to review this GAN. I believe I have addressed all your concers listed above as suggested. Cheers.--Tomobe03 (talk) 16:26, 7 September 2021 (UTC)