Talk:Coronation of the Byzantine emperor/GA1

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GA Review

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Reviewer: Tomobe03 (talk · contribs) 22:06, 17 October 2023 (UTC)Reply


I intend to review this article over the next few days.--Tomobe03 (talk) 22:06, 17 October 2023 (UTC)Reply

Checklist

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GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose, spelling, and grammar):   b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):  
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (reference section):   b (inline citations to reliable sources):   c (OR):   d (copyvio and plagiarism):  
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):   b (focused):  
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:  
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:  
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):   b (appropriate use with suitable captions):  
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:  

Comments

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According to the edit history, the article is stable (no edit wars etc.)--Tomobe03 (talk) 09:05, 21 October 2023 (UTC)Reply

The fact that a usurper—usually an army officer—could successfully install himself on the throne and become accepted as a legitimate emperor led modern historians to describe the government of the later Roman Empire as "absolutism tempered by the right of revolution". Is there a consensus on this among the modern historians, or is this a majority view or only a minority view. Who is quoted in the end of the sentence? --Tomobe03 (talk) 09:26, 21 October 2023 (UTC)Reply

AFAIK it is very much the common view (at least among scholars, the public view, such as it is, of Byzantium is an exaggerated parody of the actual state); there are even historians, like Kaldellis who is listed in further reading, who go further that the emperors were still subject to quasi-democratic pressures from the people and quasi-constitutional restrictions on their exercise of power. The phrase comes from Charanis, and I've added him in the text. Constantine 09:12, 22 October 2023 (UTC)Reply

In The coronation of Leo I took place in Constantinople's Campus Martius outside the city walls... Campus Martius is linked to the article on Rome's Campus Martius where nothing is said on the Constantinople's Campus Martius. This is against WP:EGG and such links should not be there. --Tomobe03 (talk) 09:56, 21 October 2023 (UTC)Reply

Redlinked to an article on Constantinople's analogue Constantine 09:17, 22 October 2023 (UTC)Reply

Buskins should be wikilinked. --Tomobe03 (talk) 10:15, 21 October 2023 (UTC)Reply

Done. Constantine 09:32, 22 October 2023 (UTC)Reply

I would also suggest having piped wikilinks for taper and ambo for easier reference as some readers might find it useful to look up the terms.--Tomobe03 (talk) 10:45, 21 October 2023 (UTC)Reply

Done. Constantine 09:32, 22 October 2023 (UTC)Reply

In The patriarch said a prayer, and the emperor was crowned with the diadem, which by this time had evolved to an elaborate gem-encrusted circlet., I assume that "by this time" means the 5th or 6th century. Is that correct? In either case, readers would probably benefit from explicit reference to the time. --Tomobe03 (talk) 10:14, 21 October 2023 (UTC)Reply

Good point, done. Constantine 09:32, 22 October 2023 (UTC)Reply

In ...he retired to a nearby hall in the Great Palace for this part of the ceremony..., it is not quite clear where from. I assume it is the Hippodrome, but upon reading the sentence I was not sure. Could you please clarify? --Tomobe03 (talk) 10:27, 21 October 2023 (UTC)Reply

Clarified. Constantine 09:32, 22 October 2023 (UTC)Reply

Looking at the Great Palace of Constantinople article and assuming it is correct, I am under the impression that the palace was adjacent to the Hippodrome. If so, I believe the word "adjacent" (or a synonym) could be added to ...the new emperor proceeded from the Great Palace to the imperial box (kathisma) in the Hippodrome... or another appropriate place for clarity. On the first reading I got the impression of an imperial procession along streets or something along those lines. --Tomobe03 (talk) 10:27, 21 October 2023 (UTC)Reply

Good point, clarified. Constantine 09:32, 22 October 2023 (UTC)Reply

Now that I have taken a closer look at the palace, I remembered reading After Leo I, the ceremonies described in the sources took place at the Hippodrome,[31] except for Justinian I, who was crowned in a hall of the Great Palace known as the Delphax. At the first glance I interpreted this to mean that the Great Palace was known as the Delphax. Suggest rewording "crowned in the Delphax hall of the Great Palace" or something along those lines for clarity. --Tomobe03 (talk) 10:30, 21 October 2023 (UTC)Reply

Done. Constantine 09:32, 22 October 2023 (UTC)Reply

What is meant by ...in twelver groups...? --Tomobe03 (talk) 10:50, 21 October 2023 (UTC)Reply

Groups of twelve, reworded. Constantine 09:32, 22 October 2023 (UTC)Reply

The link to a section of the same article found in ...considerable scholarly debate as to its origins. violates MOS:CIRCULAR and should be removed. This appears as a summary/introduction of a different section and it appears odd that unction is discussed at three different places (apart from the lead) with two separate and non-contiguous sections on the topic, especially having a single sentence not really offering much except a preview of the section further below. If this sentence is meant as introduction, I'd suggest moving it to the first following 'unction' section. If unction should be discussed at this particular point, I suggest you move the appropriate prose here. If the topic of unction / unction debate is too complex to address in summary style, I'd suggest splitting the topic per WP:SUMMARY. The current solution makes it difficult to navigate the topic. --Tomobe03 (talk) 11:08, 21 October 2023 (UTC)Reply

I have removed the link to the section. The disjointed structure is because the section 'Unction' refers to the procedure of the unction during the ritual, while the later section is about the scholarly debate. I don't want to amalgamate the two as in my view they serve different purposes. Constantine 09:32, 22 October 2023 (UTC)Reply

Link Circlet --Tomobe03 (talk) 11:17, 21 October 2023 (UTC)Reply

Done. Constantine 09:32, 22 October 2023 (UTC)Reply

While linked, allowing quick lookup, Before the trisagion, he and other church dignitaries mounted the ambo... would be easier to read of the beginning read like "Before the trisagion hymn..." or something along those lines as it would let casual readers to find out at a glance it was a chanted or sung hymn and then XYZ moved on. Not really a dealbreaker since it is linked, but a suggestion. --Tomobe03 (talk) 11:23, 21 October 2023 (UTC)Reply

Good point, added. Constantine 09:32, 22 October 2023 (UTC)Reply

Does "until then" in The crown, which until then was kept in the sanctuary by the deacons... mean until after unction or until the late period? Could you clarify this in the text? --Tomobe03 (talk) 11:26, 21 October 2023 (UTC)Reply

Done. Constantine 09:32, 22 October 2023 (UTC)Reply

Since it is in the first sentence in a section, in place of "now" in Both emperor and empress now mounted the imperial platform... there should be "after crowning" or something to that effect to avoid the need to consult the previous section to determine what is meant in this section. --Tomobe03 (talk) 11:32, 21 October 2023 (UTC)Reply

Corrected. Constantine 09:32, 22 October 2023 (UTC)Reply

The imperial couple remains seated... should be "The imperial couple remained seated..." --Tomobe03 (talk) 11:32, 21 October 2023 (UTC)Reply

Fixed. Constantine 09:32, 22 October 2023 (UTC)Reply

Link censer --Tomobe03 (talk) 11:35, 21 October 2023 (UTC)Reply

Done. Constantine 09:32, 22 October 2023 (UTC)Reply

Is the word "Great" missing before "Entrance" in Thus dressed, the emperor led the Entrance procession...? --Tomobe03 (talk) 11:39, 21 October 2023 (UTC)Reply

Well spotted, added. Constantine 09:32, 22 October 2023 (UTC)Reply

Is "during" (or similar) missing from ...seated apart from the Nicene Creed, the Lord's Prayer, and the Elevation. --Tomobe03 (talk) 11:46, 21 October 2023 (UTC)Reply

Clarified. Constantine 09:32, 22 October 2023 (UTC)Reply

Should ...laity began received the communion... be "...laity began receiving the communion..." or "...laity received the communion..."?

"Fixed. Constantine 09:32, 22 October 2023 (UTC)Reply

Spell out and link Wilhelm Ensslin. --Tomobe03 (talk) 12:01, 21 October 2023 (UTC)Reply

Done. Constantine 12:42, 22 October 2023 (UTC)Reply

The reference to M. Manojlović is incorrect in the first name initial (correctly taken over from the referenced work, but the error is in the cited work). Namely, the referenced work (Charanis) specifies "9 M. Manojlovió, " Le peuple de Constantinople, de 400 à 800 après J.-C. Etude spéciale de ses forces armées, des éléments qui le composaient et de son rôle constitutionnel pendant cette période," translated from the Croatian by Henri Grégoire, Byzantion , XI (Brussels, 1936), 617. This work was originally published in Nastavni Vjesnik, XII (Zagreb, 1904), 1-91." However, the referenced author is Gavro Manojlović as confirmed here [1] where it is said that his doctoral thesis was "Zur Erklärung der Widerstandskraft des späteren römischen Reiches (400–800 n. Chr.). Das römisch-griechische Volk: Das Volk (Demos) von Konstantinopel (printed in Croatian language in: Nastavni vjesnik, 1904; French translation in: Byzantion, Bruxelles 1936, p. o. 1937) (italicised text is my translation). Correct the initial "M." to first name and link using the ill template.--Tomobe03 (talk) 12:28, 21 October 2023 (UTC)Reply

Thanks a lot for tracing him, corrected now. Constantine 12:42, 22 October 2023 (UTC)Reply

Drop "Peter" fron ...but Peter Charanis has pointed out that... per MOS:SURNAME --Tomobe03 (talk) 12:33, 21 October 2023 (UTC)Reply

Done. Constantine 12:42, 22 October 2023 (UTC)Reply

Even though his year of coronation/reign was noted above, I'd repeat it in This is first recorded in the coronation of Anastasius I... since this place is far below in the text and there's lot of years mentioned in between. Not a dealbreaker though, just a suggestion. The same applies to similarly spaced mentions of coronations as you might see fit. --Tomobe03 (talk) 12:40, 21 October 2023 (UTC)Reply

Good point, especially since the years are mostly given for other emperors; added. Constantine 12:42, 22 October 2023 (UTC)Reply

There should be no duplicate wikilinks. Currently there are proskynesis, Patrikios, John VI Kantakouzenos, Caesar (title), and George Ostrogorsky.--Tomobe03 (talk) 12:50, 21 October 2023 (UTC)Reply

Done.

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The lede seems too short. The article is of considerable length and covers the topic comprehensively and per MOS:LEAD the lede should summarize it appropritely. The lede as is gives the briefest possible summary, which is fine, although a bit more should be there to introduce the topic better to especially to readers who will read the lede and nothing else. Guideline MOS:LEADLENGTH recommends three or four paragraphs long lede for articles having 30,000 characters of prose or more (and this one has more than 43 thousand). Granted, the present lede could be split in two, but I would urge you to expand a bit on it.--Tomobe03 (talk) 13:19, 21 October 2023 (UTC)Reply

Overall the article appears sufficiently broad and free of POV.--Tomobe03 (talk) 13:24, 21 October 2023 (UTC)Reply

All prose appears well-referenced, but I'll continue the review (source spotchecks) later and hope to conclude it tomorrow.--Tomobe03 (talk) 13:38, 21 October 2023 (UTC)Reply

Earwig's Copyvio Detector returns all clear, so no issues on that point.--Tomobe03 (talk) 19:42, 22 October 2023 (UTC)Reply

Referencing spotchecks all turned out fine, AGF on the rest. I believe only change of the image is left to do.--Tomobe03 (talk) 20:16, 22 October 2023 (UTC)Reply

Good to go, passing.--Tomobe03 (talk) 09:25, 26 October 2023 (UTC)Reply