Talk:Craig McAllister/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 20:09, 22 August 2011 (UTC)

I'll review this article shortly. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 20:09, 22 August 2011 (UTC)

Here are the issues I found:

• There's some questionable paraphrasing in a spot. It's nothing blatant or quick-fail worthy, just a bit on the close side:
  • Article = "he attracted interest from a number of Conference sides and he eventually signed for Grays Athletic."; Source = "earned interest from a number of Blue Square Premier sides. McAllister eventually signed for Grays Athletic," I'd change "a number of" to several, and maybe take out eventually and put in a date. That should solve any problems there. Rest of the sources I looked at check out clean.
• Richard Logan links to a disambig page. Have it link to the correct footballer.
• Ref #35 ("Bees make late double swoop".) is a deadlink.
• Adding in a couple McAllisters to the lead and the second body paragraph may be helpful to break monotony.
• "where he made 6 appearances" six
• "He went on to score 7 goals in his fist season" make sure to spell out single-digit numbers when they're standalone like this. double check the article for them.
• "He finished 2002–03 with thirty-five goals to his name, from forty-seven games." reword slightly, maybe simply "...with 35 goals in 47 games." Ironically, you're spelling out the bigger numbers when you can just write them normally. If you have to hyphenate a number, just spell it out, basically. Again, go through the article and fix, I'm not listing each example. (Sentences like these "After scoring 66 times in 112 games for Basingstoke Town," are what I want to see)
• The infobox shows 92 apps and 55 goals for Basingstoke Town, but the chart below has 96 and 53. Which is right?

I'll put the article on hold and pass when the issues are fixed. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 16:34, 23 August 2011 (UTC)

Everything checks out now, so I'll pass the article as a GA. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 19:49, 23 August 2011 (UTC)