Talk:Cream the Rabbit/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 15:44, 14 May 2014 (UTC)

I was gonna review Green Hill Zone a few days ago but I got beaten to it. People might know the drill, I focus on copy editing issues. I'll read through this article now. Thanks! ☠ Jaguar ☠ 15:44, 14 May 2014 (UTC)

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

1. Is it reasonably well written?

   A. Prose quality:

   B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:

2. Is it factually accurate and verifiable?

   A. References to sources:

   B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:

   C. No original research:

3. Is it broad in its coverage?

   A. Major aspects:

   B. Focused:

4. Is it neutral?

   Fair representation without bias:

5. Is it stable?

   No edit wars, etc:

6. Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?

   A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:

   B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:

7. Overall:

   Pass or Fail:

Initial comments

Lead

• "a Chao creature named Cheese" - why is this in bold if Cheese isn't the focus of the article?

• Someone's fixed it. Tezero (talk) 20:06, 14 May 2014 (UTC)

That someone is me. :) Shane Cyrus (talk) 04:41, 15 May 2014 (UTC)

• Other than this the lead complies per WP:LEAD

Design and characteristics

• "Cream loves the Chao creatures, a staple in the series, and is a friend to them all" - syntax can be improved, does Cream loves the Chao creatures (a staple in the series) and is a friend to them all. And another thing, what series? Were the Chao creatures only in Sonic Adventure? Sorry for my lack of knowledge as I've only played the 90s Sonics (and Sonic Heroes...)

• Reworded and sourced. It's the Sonic series overall, by the way; they first appeared in Adventure and have played various roles in most of the games after that, kinda like Toads from the Mario games. Tezero (talk) 20:06, 14 May 2014 (UTC)

Appearances

• "to defeat Eggman, who is planning to build an empire. A similar goal followed with Sonic Advance 3 in 2003." - what does this mean? Was the plot/narrative of Sonic Advance 3 similar to Sonic Advance 2?

• Reworded. Tezero (talk) 20:06, 14 May 2014 (UTC)

• "In Sonic Rush, protagonist Blaze the Cat" - was there more than one playable protagonist in Sonic Rush?

• It was her and Sonic. Fixed. Tezero (talk) 20:06, 14 May 2014 (UTC)

Reception

Everything checks out here, the section is balanced as it features both negative and positive opinions from critics.

On hold

This is a well-written article. I've checked the references and they seem reliable, in place and working. Other than those few minor concerns I have found this article meets the GA criteria in most places. It is stable, the prose is good and is focused. I'll put this on hold for the standard seven days, but this shouldn't take even a day! ☠ Jaguar ☠ 16:09, 14 May 2014 (UTC)

Close - promoted

Sorry for coming back to this late as I've had hell at college. The article meets the GA criteria, the prose is in good standing, the references are all acceptable and every minor concern has been dealt with. Thanks for doing them so quickly. It's yet another Sonic GA! ☠ Jaguar ☠ 16:32, 16 May 2014 (UTC)